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Hello, T. Donna.
It's dark outside.
Literally, I am so tired and sleepy now.
There were so many patients and paperworks in the clinic as usual.
How about you?
Is your country safe from the typhoon now?
There were two new staff in the clinic.
One of them talked about work environment too much.
Finally, she said that she wanted to resign today, so I let her leave.
I think this is good, because we save our time, money, and effort to educate her.
She had a bad attitude and impression.
Meanwhile, during my work time, I educated the chief manager for many paperworks.
Thus, I expect her to do lots of paperworks instead of me someday.
Back to a complaint, as we know that, no discomfort means no improvement.
Because someone feel uncomfortable, we can think of change.
In my case, many clients and patients complained about small space and old facilities, therefore we decided to move our clinic.
Consequently, we will have a wide space and nice interior next year.
I should go to bed now.
See you.

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Good day, Dr. Kim!

I forgot to ask if you had enough rest during the class today. So, I hope that you are well-rested and coping with all the tasks in your clinic for today. I agree that your applicants should be able to determine if they want to work with you or not as soon as they see the working conditions in your clinic to avoid wasting time, effort, and resources. Meanwhile, I am so glad to hear about the chief manager handling more challenging tasks. Hope and pray for good applicants to join you soon before this year ends and eventually, move to your new workplace.

Complaints may be one of the objective ways we can determine that there is a n issue we need to resolve. In your case as a boss, moving on from a complaint is crucial. Learning how to face the problems head on as well as getting the support of your team play vital roles in addressing these concerns. I wish you nothing but the best in your next clinic! 

For this composition, your grammar consistency is very high considering your exhaustion from work. Your ideas are focused, well-supported, and very well-stated. Carry on with your excellent writing skills!

I will catch you in class again soon.

-T. Donna~

Hello, T. Donna.
>> Corect!

It's dark outside.
>> Correct!

Literally, I am so tired and sleepy now.
>> Correct!

There were so many patients and paperworks in the clinic as usual.
>> Correct!

How about you?
>> Correct!

Is your country safe from the typhoon now?
>> Correct!

There were two new staff in the clinic.
>> Correct!
Or: There are two new staff in the clinic.

One of them talked about work environment too much.
>> One of them talked about the work environment too much.

Finally, she said that she wanted to resign today, so I let her leave.
>> Correct!

I think this is good, because we save our time, money, and effort to educate her.
>> Correct!

She had a bad attitude and impression.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, during my work time, I educated the chief manager for many paperworks.
>> Correct!
Or: Meanwhile, during my work time, I (educated/trained) the chief manager to do many paperworks.

Thus, I expect her to do lots of paperworks instead of me someday.
>> Correct!
Or: Thus, I expect her to do lots of paperwork instead of me someday.

Back to a complaint, as we know that, no discomfort means no improvement.
>> Correct!
Or: Back to complaints, as we know that, no discomfort means no improvement.

Because someone feel uncomfortable, we can think of change.
>> Because someone feels uncomfortable, we can think of change.

In my case, many clients and patients complained about small space and old facilities, therefore we decided to move our clinic.
>> In my case, many clients and patients complained about the small space and old facilities, therefore, we decided to move our clinic.

Consequently, we will have a wide space and nice interior next year.
>> Consequently, we will have a wider space and better interior next year.

I should go to bed now.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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