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Hello, T.Donna.
How was your day?
Typhoon has gone now?
I had read a news about philippines, and I was so surprised that there were around 20 typhoons in your country every year.
I guess you and your family always have to prepare for extra electricity and supplies.
Anyway, I hope you and your family are always safe.
Today, I came to the clinic earlier than usual.
I talked with some of our staff; the chief manager, the insurance dept. manager, and senior coordinator.
Last week, the chief manager and senior coordinator told us that they would quit the job, however, they told me they changed their minds.
It was so grateful and made me feel good.
The insurance dept. mangager said she would resign, though.
Because of many changes, I had a hectic day, but I felt better.
That's because I could see many hopes about our future clinic.
Most of works today have the deadline, that's tonight.
I was done with the most of the work now.
So, I feel happy.
I should get going.
Take care. See you.

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Good day, Dr. Kim!

The typhoon is gone by now but there is another one on its way. I think it will hit almost the entire Philippines again. You are right, during this time, we charge all of our gadgets but they are still not enough power to continue work and it forces me to go to the office on a very stormy morning. I am lucky since yesterday and today are holidays in my country. Nonetheless, I truly appreciate your concern. As of this writing, there are already 98 people who died from the last typhoon.

Well, since you have the great gift of communication skills, you can soothe your members and influence them to stay in your clinic by giving them valuable lessons and experiences to treat patience with excellence. I am not sure specifically how you can execute this but I trust you can and will do it with Dr M.J. Good luck and God bless.

Finally, your composition below is excellent! Your grammar had become so strong and very orderly as well as your transitions and syntax. Consequently, your sentences were mostly correct. The suggestions below are so few. Thus, make it a habit to read and analyze them always.

Great job! See you next time!

Enjoy your busy day!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

Typhoon has gone now?
>> Correct!

I had read a news about philippines, and I was so surprised that there were around 20 typhoons in your country every year.
>> Correct!
Or: I had read a news about the Philippines, and I was so surprised that there are around 20 typhoons in your country every year.

I guess you and your family always have to prepare for extra electricity and supplies.
>> Correct!

Anyway, I hope you and your family are always safe.
>> Correct!

Today, I came to the clinic earlier than usual.
>> Correct!

I talked with some of our staff; the chief manager, the insurance dept. manager, and senior coordinator.
>> Correct!

Last week, the chief manager and senior coordinator told us that they would quit the job, however, they told me they changed their minds.
>> Correct!

It was so grateful and made me feel good.
>> I was so grateful and it made me feel good.

The insurance dept. mangager said she would resign, though.
>> Correct!
Or: manager

Because of many changes, I had a hectic day, but I felt better.
>> Correct!

That's because I could see many hopes about our future clinic.
>> Correct!

Most of works today have the deadline, that's tonight.
>> Correct!

I was done with the most of the work now.
>> I was done with most of the work now.

So, I feel happy.
>> Correct!

I should get going.
>> Correct!

Take care. See you.
>> Correct!
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