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What is your hometown famous for? Give examples like famous festivals, food, people, and places.

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I guess there are a lot of famous things at my hometown. You can walk around Han river and can see a kind of the cultural heritage sites. Also, there are various foods in the street. A place where there are many music festivals and competition of sports in Jamsil arena.

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Thank you so much for sharing some facts about your hometown, Elic. I liked how you described what I would be able to see once I visit your hometown, like the places you can go to, the food you can eat, and the events you can experience. I would've loved it more if you were able to put it in detail. But nonetheless, you still did well in this homework. Your sentences are improving tremendously, the construction of your sentences are also improving. So keep it up and always believe in yourself!

- Teacher Raven 

I guess there are a lot of famous things at my hometown.
>> I guess there are a lot of famous things that you can find in my hometown.
You can walk around Han river and can see a kind of the cultural heritage sites.
>> You can walk around the Han river and see so many kinds of cultural heritage sites.
Also, there are various foods in the street.
>> Correct.
A place where there are many music festivals and competition of sports in Jamsil arena.
>> There are also various music festivals and sports competitions in the Jamsil arena.
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