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Do you think most companies look after their staff? Why or why not?

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It depend on the company, but most companies care their staff to a certain extend.
It is similar about welfare.
As far as I know every companies have to provide a comprehensive medical testing for staff.
And major company also provide every meals and even dormitory.
After work, even they provide leisure system like gym, ground, shopping point..
Company almost responsible about staff's life.
Like this if company provide these welfare it must be helpful their staff. Company can control staff's stress and it will make people improve efficiency.

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Hello Eun Chae!
You are right in your point of view.  Check the corrections suggested in your writing and memorize the correct patterns and spellings of words.  Try to use these sentences in class too. ^^



~T. Maine


It depend on the company, but most companies care their staff to a certain extend.
>>It depends on the company, but most companies care about their staff to a certain extent. 
It is similar about welfare.
>> It is similar to their welfare. 
As far as I know every companies have to provide a comprehensive medical testing for staff.
>> As far as I know, every company has to provide comprehensive medical testing for the staff. 
And major company also provide every meals and even dormitory.
>> And major companies also provide meals and dormitories. 
After work, even they provide leisure system like gym, ground, shopping point..
>> After work, they even provide a leisure system like the gym, play ground, and shopping areas. 
Company almost responsible about staff's life.
>> Companies are responsible for their staff's life. 
Like this if company provide these welfare it must be helpful their staff. 
>> Like this, if the company provides these things, they might be helpful to their staff's development. 
Company can control staff's stress and it will make people improve efficiency.
>> Companies can control staff's stress and it will make them work efficiently. 

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