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Hello, T.Donna.
Have you come home now?
You always seem to have variety experiences, so I sometimes jealous of you.
About my clinic, there were so many works, but we could handle it.
One of our expensive lifting device didn't work, and this was third time, so I complained so much to the related company.
I told the worker of that company with full of rage, hence, they checked the device and fixed it immediately.
As you know, an important staff had resigned, so I had to do more paperwork by myself.
Doctor, as a boss, has a critical disadvantages.
During work time, we have to see many patients, so we don't have enough time to do other works.
As a business man, we have to check many things everyday; Administration, labor, tax, advertisement, education, and so on.
Many Korean say, "Doctor's family is happy, but doctor is not."
But, you don't need to worry, I am satisfied with my life.
About Deadline, I keep most deadlines, but always without spare time.
I think I am not diligent.
See you.

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Good morning, once again, Dr. Kim!

A variety of experiences may be exhausting but fulfilling. Metting your friends and experienceing so many kinds of food is your best time to do that. Then, have a wonderful time today.

Sometimes, being a doctor yourself and the boss at the same time can be too crucial and taxing but then, believe me, a lot of people around you wish to be just like you but never got the chance. Hence, these are very good kinds of problems because they help you gain experience only in a tough way.  I totally agree that your family's life is secured but you have to deal with the daily grind of your work.

Now, deadlines are not to make us 'dead' but somehow, sometimes, it feels stifling to beat them. So, we have to be very organized and systematic in creating plans otherwise, we will never finish tasks. At times, there are even things that go wrong so we need to be able to act fast and think of ways to create solutions to the problems we encounter.  We just need to be stronger, more resilient, flexible, and prayerful to achieve excellence in meeting deadlines.

Your piece of writing has clarity, style, and correctness. Thank you for your diligence and hard, efficient work always!

See you next week!

-T. Donna!

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Have you come home now?
>> Correct!

You always seem to have variety experiences, so I sometimes jealous of you.
>> You always seem to have variety of experiences, so I sometimes jealous of you.

About my clinic, there were so many works, but we could handle it.
>> Correct!
Or: work

One of our expensive lifting device didn't work, and this was third time, so I complained so much to the related company.
>> One of our expensive lifting device didn't work, and this was the third time, so I complained so much to the related company.

I told the worker of that company with full of rage, hence, they checked the device and fixed it immediately.
>> Correct!

As you know, an important staff had resigned, so I had to do more paperwork by myself.
>> Correct!

Doctor, as a boss, has a critical disadvantages.
>> The doctor, as a boss, has critical disadvantages.

During work time, we have to see many patients, so we don't have enough time to do other works.
>> Correct!

As a business man, we have to check many things everyday; Administration, labor, tax, advertisement, education, and so on.
>> Correct! 
Or: administration

Many Korean say, "Doctor's family is happy, but doctor is not."
>> Many Koreans say, "The doctor's family is happy, but the doctor is not."

But, you don't need to worry, I am satisfied with my life.
>> Correct!

About Deadline, I keep most deadlines, but always without spare time.
>> Correct!
Or: About deadline, I keep most deadlines, but always without a spare time.

I think I am not diligent.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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