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Explain one of the good movies you have seen. Why is it good?

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Personally, I am really into watching movies and it is one of my favorite hobbies.
About 2 months ago, my family watched a movie titled "Confidential Assignment2: International"
It is an action and comedy movie. There are starred a lot of famous actors here in South Korea.
Because the concept and story are fun and not violent, it is really suitable for family as well as the younger generation.
Especially, there are 2 actors who are Hyun Bin, and Daniel Henny. They are pretty hansome and wonderful with action scenes.
Apart from that, seeing my son's laughing while the movie, it is enough to make me happy.

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Personally, I am really into watching movies and it is one of my favorite hobbies.

>> CORRECT!


About 2 months ago, my family watched a movie titled "Confidential Assignment2: International"

>> About 2 months ago, my family watched a movie titled, "Confidential Assignment2: International".


It is an action and comedy movie. 

>> CORRECT!


There are starred a lot of famous actors here in South Korea.

>> It starred a lot of famous actors here in South Korea.


Because the concept and story are fun and not violent, it is really suitable for family as well as the younger generation.

>> Because the concept and story are fun and not violent, it is really suitable for a family as well as for the younger generation.


Especially, there are 2 actors who are Hyun Bin, and Daniel Henny. 
They are pretty hansome and wonderful with action scenes.

>>  Especially the two actors who are in that movie, Hyun Bin, and Daniel Henny, were pretty handsome and were wonderful in action scenes.


Apart from that, seeing my son's laughing while the movie, it is enough to make me happy.

>> Apart from that, seeing my son laughing while watching the movie is enough to make me happy.

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