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What is your happy pill?

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What makes me happy and enthusiastic as happy pills are the following :
First, my family is sure to be a happy pill for me. Although it has been hard looking after three children, they three remind me of my life's purpose and let me know how to be happy in a tough world.
Second, studying is one of my happy pills. My studying of history, science, math, English and even the Bible was initiated because I wanted to help children do their studying at school. However, I found it interesting, moreover studying history and science after work became a happy pill.
Lastly, my faith in God is a happy pill. My life has been full of ups and downs. However, whenever I was in deep water, God was with me and helped me realize what I hadn't known before. I know God will be with me and my children afterward.

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Hi Sir Steve!^^ 

Thank you for sending your homework.
Happy pill may vary because of people's characters and behaviors. 
It can be a person, a mood, food, a place or it can be anything. 

Andrea 

What makes me happy and enthusiastic as happy pills are the following :
>> For my happy pills that make me happy and enthusiastic are the following: 

First, my family is sure to be a happy pill for me. 
>> First, my family is sure to be my happy pill. 

Although it has been hard looking after three children, they three remind me of my life's purpose and let me know how to be happy in a tough world.
>> 
Although it has been hard looking after three children, the three of them remind me of my life's purpose and let me know how to be happy in a tough world.

Second, studying is one of my happy pills. 
>> Second, studying is also one of my happy pill. 

My studying of history, science, math, English and even the Bible was initiated because I wanted to help children do their studying at school. 
>> Me studying about history, mat, science, English and even the bible was initiated because I wanted to help children with their studies. 

However, I found it interesting, moreover studying history and science after work became a happy pill.
>> However, I found it more interesting to study history and science after work, then eventually it became my happy pill. 

Lastly, my faith in God is a happy pill.
>> Correct 

My life has been full of ups and downs.
>> Correct 

However, whenever I was in deep water, God was with me and helped me realize what I hadn't known before. 
>> However, whenever I an in deep water, God is with me and help me realize what I didn't know before. 

I know God will be with me and my children afterward.
>> I know God will always be with me and my children. 

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