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Which hobbies are the most popular with women in your country? With men

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Nowadays, the most popular hobby is health club and take a picture their body profile with women and men both of them.
On the instagram, several people are posting their body picture.
They are muscle and almost nude.
It become a trend that take a picture body.
In the old days, men only make muscle and women are like soft body. But now people know the important of exercise so almost people go to the gym.
Many people get their exersise hobby.
And I want either. I want to take a picture.
But this year is fail so I look foward to next time.

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Hi, there, Eun Chae!
Choose a hobby that you can do and have fun with.  If you really want to have exercise as your hobby too, then do it.  Make a good schedule for it. ^^


~T. Maine


Nowadays, the most popular hobby is health club and take a picture their body profile with women and men both of them.
>> Nowadays, the most popular hobby is going to the health club and taking pictures of their bodies, both men and women. 
On the Instagram, several people are posting their body picture.
>> On Instagram, there are several people who are posting their body pictures. 
They are muscle and almost nude.
>> They have muscles and are almost nude. 
It become a trend that take a picture body.
>> It becomes a trend to take body pictures. 
In the old days, men only make muscle and women are like soft body. 
>> In the old days, men only have muscles, and women used to like nice figures. 
But now people know the important of exercise so almost people go to the gym.
>> But now, people know the importance of exercise so almost all people go to the gym. 
Many people get their exersise hobby.
>>Many people use exercise as a hobby. 
And I want either. 
>> And I want it too. 
I want to take a picture.
>>  Correct. 
But this year is fail so I look foward to next time.
>> But this year is a failure for me so I look forward to next time. 

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