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Hello.
It's already night, dark outside.
Today, there was a bad event in my clinic.
Dr. MJ and I argued about something.
Actually, that was not a big deal, but both of us were upset.
Of course, we ended the argument after a while.
I thought we were somewhat nerve-racking these days because of hospital moving.
Hence, I realized that we should have good manners to each other, although we are so close.
Don't you think so?
Recently, I've seen many videos about relationships.
Most of them said, as we are close each other, we have to respect more.
I can't disagree with that.
Anyway, we had a dinner after a long time.
Dr. MJ likes meat, so we ate "Samgyupsal".
And then, we discussed about our future clinic.
There are so many things to improve in the clinic.
Now I do my homework.
In Korea, Marijuana is absolutely illegal.
When I was around twenties, I used to smoke too much, and at that time I wonder if I could do Marijuana someday.
However, now I think I should not do that.
See you.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good day, Dr. Kim!

I am sad to know about your misunderstanding with Dr. MJ. You are right-familiarity breeds contempt, says an English adage that means the closer you are, the more you cross the line of comfort. Hence, we need to uphold utmost respect especially when you work in the same place. Anyway, as I always say, I wish the best for your clinic. Hard work is really needed to keep the interaction, excellence, and peace in an organization. An advice I can give probably is to draw the line of your friendship and profession.

Meanwhile, marijuana is a controversial plant due it's effects to people. Since I have never tried it as well, I cannot comment anything about it. Yet, if it will help others to cure their illness, then it should be regulated.

Now, your composition had a very high rate of correct sentences. Read over my grammar suggestions below and congratulations on a job well done!

See you again soon.

-T. Donna~
 
Hello.
>> Correct!

It's already night, dark outside.
>> It's already night and dark outside.

Today, there was a bad event in my clinic.
>> Correct!
Dr. MJ and I argued about something.
>> Correct!

Actually, that was not a big deal, but both of us were upset.
>> Correct!

Of course, we ended the argument after a while.
>> Correct!

I thought we were somewhat nerve-racking these days because of hospital moving.
>>I thought we were somewhat nerve-wracked these days because of the hospital moving.

Hence, I realized that we should have good manners to each other, although we are so close.
>> Correct!

Don't you think so?
>> Correct!

Recently, I've seen many videos about relationships.
>> Correct!

Most of them said, as we are close each other, we have to respect more.
>> Most of them said, as we are getting closer with each other, we have to respect each other more.

I can't disagree with that.
>> Correct!

Anyway, we had a dinner after a long time.
>> Correct!

Dr. MJ likes meat, so we ate "Samgyupsal".
>> Correct!

And then, we discussed about our future clinic.
>> Correct!

There are so many things to improve in the clinic.
>> Correct!

Now I do my homework.
>> Correct!

In Korea, Marijuana is absolutely illegal.
>> Correct!

When I was around twenties, I used to smoke too much, and at that time I wonder if I could do Marijuana someday.
>> Correct!

However, now I think I should not do that.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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