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Hello, T.Donna.
I had a hectic day.
After breakfast, I worked out in the gym, and then rode a bike with my wife. (I had a morning off today.)
As soon as I took a shower, I drove my car to get our clinic.
That's because there was something to upgrade in the clinic.
Recently, computers of mine and Dr. MJ's were too slow to do our job.
So, we decided to upgrade our computers with higher quality, and today was the day.
After finishing upgrade, we had to contact the company of electric chart, skin analyzer, and CCTV.
After that, as you expected, we had a seasoned Bendeng-i.
We ate too much, and we regretted to overeat.
Bendeng-i was fantastic, though.
There were so many patients and paperworks in the afternoon.
Thus, I was so exhausted when I was done.
In addition, I had diarrhea, maybe because of raw Bendeng-i.
Nevertheless, I also had a seasoned bendeng-i for my dinner.
My family sang a song for me, and I blew off the candle on the cake.
I was really happy.
I was tired, though.
See you.

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Good morning, Dr. Kim!

What an exciting birthday you had today! I am sure that it was exhilirating from the start to finish but then when I saw you today in class, you seem to be doing just fine. Anyway, enjoy the remaining bendang-ih as you have gained immunity over this fish. Do not let such a small fish ruin your stomach.^^

Meanwhile, it is great to hear about your clinic expansion and keeping up to date to the cutting edge technology to cater to your clients. I think that is is the best way to attract them as well as for your staff to be satisfied with your overall equipment.

Your sentences on your compostition are very consistent in accuracy and always shows some twist with your daily routine and experience, excellent job!

Every day can feel like your birthday so, just like a child who is always excited to blow another candle in his birthday cake- be this child and have a great day every day!

See you soon in class.

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

I had a hectic day.
>> Correct!

After breakfast, I worked out in the gym, and then rode a bike with my wife. (I had a morning off today.)
>> Correct!

As soon as I took a shower, I drove my car to get our clinic.
>> As soon as I took a shower, I drove my car to get to our clinic.

That's because there was something to upgrade in the clinic.
>> Correct!

Recently, computers of mine and Dr. MJ's were too slow to do our job.
>> Recently, our computers owith Dr. MJ and I were too slow to do our job.

So, we decided to upgrade our computers with higher quality, and today was the day.
>> Correct!

After finishing upgrade, we had to contact the company of electric chart, skin analyzer, and CCTV.
>> After finishing the upgrade, we had to contact the companies of the electric chart, skin analyzer, and CCTV.

After that, as you expected, we had a seasoned Bendeng-i.
>> Correct!

We ate too much, and we regretted to overeat.
>> Correct!

Bendeng-i was fantastic, though.
>> Correct!

There were so many patients and paperworks in the afternoon.
>> Correct!

Thus, I was so exhausted when I was done.
>> Correct!

In addition, I had diarrhea, maybe because of raw Bendeng-i.
>>In addition, I had diarrhea, maybe because of the raw Bendeng-i.

Nevertheless, I also had a seasoned bendeng-i for my dinner.
>> Correct!

My family sang a song for me, and I blew off the candle on the cake.
>> Correct!

I was really happy.
>> Correct!

I was tired, though.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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