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What are some common occupations or jobs in your country? Please explain your answer.

In Korea, company staffs are common occupations. And when people in 50s, there are many people who start their own businesses.

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Thank you for the information, Emily! You did a good job!-Faith-
What are some common occupations or jobs in your country? Please explain your answer.
>> CORRECT
In Korea, company staffs are common occupations. 
>> In Korea, employment is the common occupation. 
And when people in 50s, there are many people who start their own businesses.
>> Also, when people are in their 50s, many of them start their own businesses.
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