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Hello.
Today is my birthday eve.
Thus, my wife prepared some delicious foods for breakfast tomorrow.
I actually ate some of those foods, though.
Moreover, Dr. MJ is preparing a special food "seasoned Bendeng-i"; It is a kind of small fish.
A sister of Dr. MJ has a restaurant in Gang-Wha island, a representative food there is Bendeng-i.
I really love the food.
I can't wait tomorrow.
So, there are special plans for my birthday meal.
For breakfast, my wife will serve a good home-cooked food.
And for lunch, Dr. MJ and I will eat a seasoned Bendeng-i. Oh my god!!
Finally, for dinner, I'd like to drink a beer with various foods including Bendeng-i and home-cooked food.
As you can see this, it's hard to lose my weight.
As I gain weight more and more, the risk of HTN, hyperlipidemia, DM will be higher.
When I was over 90kg, I had pains of my knee and shoulder.
To keep my health, I have to control of food and drink.
Nevertheless, I feel like a boy now; I am looking foward tomorrow.
See you.

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Hi, Dr. Kim!

Excellent food with all the people you love is the most awesome way to celebrate your birthday. I wish you a stress-free celebration! 

I wonder how bendang-i tastes like... I am familiar with the miyuk guk for a longer life. 

Today, I won't keep my message long. As you already know it, my reminders of reading the suggestions I made as well as my commnedation to a job well done goes for your homework.

Thus:

Happy Birthday Wishes to Student from Teacher - Happy Birthday Wisher

Enjoy your very special day!

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

Today is my birthday eve.
>> Correct!

Thus, my wife prepared some delicious foods for breakfast tomorrow.
>> Correct!
Or: food

I actually ate some of those foods, though.
>> Correct!
Or: food

Moreover, Dr. MJ is preparing a special food "seasoned Bendeng-i"; It is a kind of small fish.
>> Moreover, Dr. MJ is preparing a special food called "seasoned Bendeng-i"; it is a kind of small fish.
Or: Moreover, Dr. MJ is preparing for a special food called "seasoned Bendeng-i" which is a kind of small fish.

A sister of Dr. MJ has a restaurant in Gang-Wha island, a representative food there is Bendeng-i.
>>: (The/A) sister of Dr. MJ has a restaurant in Gang-Wha iIsland and the representative food there is Bendeng-i.

I really love the food.
>> Correct!

I can't wait tomorrow.
>> I can't wait for tomorrow.

So, there are special plans for my birthday meal.
>> So, those are the special plans for my birthday meal.

For breakfast, my wife will serve a good home-cooked food.
>> Correct!

And for lunch, Dr. MJ and I will eat a seasoned Bendeng-i. Oh my god!!
>> Correct!
Or: And for lunch, Dr. MJ and I will eat a seasoned Bendeng-i. Oh my god!

Finally, for dinner, I'd like to drink a beer with various foods including Bendeng-i and home-cooked food.
>> Correct!

As you can see this, it's hard to lose my weight.
>> Correct!

As I gain weight more and more, the risk of HTN, hyperlipidemia, DM will be higher.
>> Correct!

When I was over 90kg, I had pains of my knee and shoulder.
>> Correct!

To keep my health, I have to control of food and drink.
>> To keep my health, I have to control my food and drinks.

Nevertheless, I feel like a boy now; I am looking foward tomorrow.
>> Nevertheless, I feel like a boy now; I am looking foward to tomorrow.

See you.
>> Correct!
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