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I don't have any new features I'd like to see on social networking sites these days. Most social networking sites have convenient features like calling, texting, checking each other's photos or videos, but I don't think there's anything more to be added here. I think it's just right as it is!

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Hello, Sheila! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

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I don't have any new features I'd like to see on social networking sites these days. 
>>> CORRECT!

Most social networking sites have convenient features like calling, texting, checking each other's photos or videos, but I don't think there's anything more to be added here. 
>>> Most social networking sites have convenient features like calling, texting, and checking each other's photos or videos, but I don't think there's anything more to be added here.

I think it's just right as it is!
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