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Yes. That's possible. Because the more social networking sites you have, the more you can focus on them and neglect real life. Then you may gradually lose friends or you may lose your grades because you cannot concentrate on your studies. Then people will be lonely.

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Hello, Sheila! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

Yes. That's possible. 
>>> CORRECT!

Because the more social networking sites you have, the more you can focus on them and neglect real life. 
>>> CORRECT!

Then you may gradually lose friends or you may lose your grades because you cannot concentrate on your studies. 
>>> CORRECT!

Then people will be lonely.
>>> CORRECT!
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