¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ì
2022-10-21 1561

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hello, T.Donna.
It's already Friday, weekend is coming.
I am looking forward to Sunday, as you guess, I enjoy taking a video.
When I take a video, I just feel like an actor and I love this feeling.
After the class, I watched the video that you are shown up.
I thought you did perfectly.
What a professionality!
Thanks to you, I realized proper gestures, so, this time I will do better with more proper expressions of my hands.
Actually, there is a bad news in my clinic today.
An important staff resigned, so we have to plan to overcome this crisis.
As always, we will solve this problem, but now I am so frustrated.
Regarding of homework, I like to drink a coffee.
My wife and Dr. MJ also like a coffee, too.
As a doctor, it's hard to say which a coffee is good for health or not, because it has a controversial.
But, I am sure if you have a rash or rosacea on your face, drinking coffee is bad for your skin.
However, I drink a coffee everyday in spite of rosacea on my skin.
Have a good weekend.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good afternoon, Dr. Kim!

It's a very happy Friday indeed! I feel excited for your video shoot! I am sure that you will have so much fun and energy doing this task. I must say, you are very, very professional on your video as well! Maybe, you should shoot more videos in a month like twice and always upload it on your YouTube channel. I wonder when can you and Dr. MJ be together in your video... Anyway, controling the movements and the tone of our voice matters a lot in making a video. Break a leg!

Sorry for the departure of another clinic staff. It's inevitable nowadays. However, I hope that those who will stay find good reasons to push through with their jobs. It has become a trend and it has to stop somehow. Nevertheless, I am sure that you and Dr. MJ will overcome these trials.

Coffee is a word that all languages in the word speak just by smellig its scent. When there is coffee, there is fun. Whether you are alone or in a group of people, it is in every cup. So many controversies indeed have been written and reported about over consumption of this beverage but we still support all the leading coffee shops such as Starbucks, among others since we believe that we cannot last a day without drinking coffee. An over intake causes palpitation and lack of sleep as a matter of fact and experience. Maybe, however, I will be drinking a cup of it everyday until the day I die. ^^
Your sentences are of average length but has relatively more correct grammar structures in frequency. So, excellent execution and organization.

I wish you and your beautiful family a very ecstatic weekend!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

It's already Friday, weekend is coming.
>> Correct!

I am looking forward to Sunday, as you guess, I enjoy taking a video.
>> Correct!

When I take a video, I just feel like an actor and I love this feeling.
>> Correct!

After the class, I watched the video that you are shown up.
>> After the class, I watched the video that you have shown.

I thought you did perfectly.
>> Correct!

What a professionality!
>> Correct! 

Thanks to you, I realized proper gestures, so, this time I will do better with more proper expressions of my hands.
>> Correct!

Actually, there is a bad news in my clinic today.
>> Correct!

An important staff resigned, so we have to plan to overcome this crisis.
>> Correct!

As always, we will solve this problem, but now I am so frustrated.
>> Correct!

Regarding of homework, I like to drink a coffee.
>> Regarding the homework, I like to drink a coffee.

My wife and Dr. MJ also like a coffee, too.
>> My wife and Dr. MJ also like coffee, too.

As a doctor, it's hard to say which a coffee is good for health or not, because it has a controversial.
>> As a doctor, it's hard to say which coffee is good for health or not, because it has a controversy.

But, I am sure if you have a rash or rosacea on your face, drinking coffee is bad for your skin.
>> Correct!

However, I drink a coffee everyday in spite of rosacea on my skin.
>> Correct!

Have a good weekend.
>> Correct!
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
120527 Hi Gemmar ÀÌ*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 691
120526 My hometown ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 1
120525 Class review. (I really thank you about your teaching!) À¯*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 1
120524 writing homework and practice Àå*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 6
120523 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 286
120522 Q È«*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 2
120521 What do you do to improve or maintain your appearance? ÀÌ*¸í ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 3
120520 Do you like visiting the library? / Where is your favorite place... ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 1
120519 the use of mobile phones in public ³ë*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 2
120518 How often do you eat out? / How much do you usually pay when you... ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 1
120517 Which is better, to go shopping on weekdays or on weekends? ¹Ú*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 802
120516 Should children have curfew? Why or why not? ÁÖ*¼® ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 0
120515 Do you interrupt your study activities or do all the homework at... ÀÌ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 597
120514 What thing do you have right now that you are renting? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 4
120513 If you can renovate something in your house, what would it be... ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-07-07 452
120512 Today\'s homework. ±è*¼Ò ¿Ï·á 2022-07-06 555
120511 7/6 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-06 563
120510 If you can renovate something in your house, what would it be... ÀÌ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-06 607
120509 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-06 400
120508 Writing Task(Jul 5th, 2022) ³²*½Â ¿Ï·á 2022-07-06 589

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04