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In my memory, my parents were happy when I got good results for something.
When I was in the elementary, middle, and high school, my parents were proud of me because I was good at studying.
They were also glad that I became a doctor.
I dreamed of becoming a doctor for a long time.
After I experienced a hard life of a medical student and passed the Korean medical licensing examination, they sincerely celebrated and were delighted.
When I graduated from school, It was difficult to meet my friends, because they lived and worked in different cities and were too busy to have time.
Sometimes, I give my regards to them by texts, and they were happy to contact with me.
I often plan surpirse parties and visits for my friends, and It leaves them awesome memories.

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Good day, Dr. Stella!

Parents are always proud of a hardworking and an excellent daughter or child. As I told you, if you were my daughter, I will broadcast that you are my daughter! ^^ Being a doctor is one of the best jobs in the world since it helps people live better. 

Making other people happy sometimes need so much effort and time. Nevertheless, it also gives a sense of pride to ourselves and to our family. 

Here on your homework, you gave many examples on how you bring joy to the lives of the people you love- your family and friends. This reflects you as a warm, sincere, and loving person. The grammar suggestions that I can only make are the correct usage of the lower case letter 'i' for words that come after the comma except the pronound 'I'. Moreover, the correct capitalization of proper noun asuch as your Korean Medical Licensing Examination. Thank you for your great grammar accuracy and skillful systematic flo of ideas once again!

Enjo your weekend!

-T. Donna~

In my memory, my parents were happy when I got good results for something.
>> Correct!
Or: In my memory, my parents were happy when I got good results from something.

When I was in the elementary, middle, and high school, my parents were proud of me because I was good at studying.
>> Correct!

They were also glad that I became a doctor.
>> Correct!

I dreamed of becoming a doctor for a long time.
>> Correct!

After I experienced a hard life of a medical student and passed the Korean medical licensing examination, they sincerely celebrated and were delighted.
>> Correct!
Or: After I experienced a hard life of a medical student and passed the Korean Medical Licensing Examination, they sincerely celebrated and were delighted.

When I graduated from school, It was difficult to meet my friends, because they lived and worked in different cities and were too busy to have time.
>> Correct!
Or: When I graduated from school, it was difficult to meet my friends, because they lived and worked in different cities and were too busy to have time.

Sometimes, I give my regards to them by texts, and they were happy to contact with me.
>> Sometimes, I give my regards to them by texts, and they are happy to contact me.

I often plan surpirse parties and visits for my friends, and It leaves them awesome memories.
>> Correct!
Or: I often plan surpirse parties and visits for my friends, and it leaves them awesome memories.
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