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Good evening.
How was your symptom?
No more cough?
I hope you will be alright soon.
At lunch break, we had a meeting with the bank men.
They told us that we should pay high interest if we borrow lots of money from their bank.
A chief of them talked about the reason of high interest.
That's because of global exchange crisis due to the war between Russia and Ukraine.
Anyway, we need plenty of money, so we will borrow it from the bank consequently.
Today's homework is about a cafe.
There is STARBUCKS near both our clinic and my home.
Most Korean prefer to go to SBuck; SBuck stands for STARBUCKS.
Meanwhile, there is a special cafe in the distance of 10 minutes from home.
The cafe's name is "Forest Outings", they have many trees and wide spaces.
In addition, they serve coffee, tea, bread, pasta, and pizza.
However, their foods and drinks are not excellent honestly.
I am getting used to a coffee in SBuck, but with my family, I'd rather go to Forest Outings.
You can google it.
See you.

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Hi, Doctor Kim!

I am now feeling so much better than yesterday, thank you for asking. I had a terrible headache, cough, phlegm, and body ache yesterday and today, they all seem to be almost gone. I appreciate your professional help. I would never want to ask you soon about anything on any symptom. In short, I do not want to be sick.

Interest rates are rocketing nowadays. Last year, I borrowed a couple of grand from the bank and they deducted the interest rate immediately. I never want to do that again. Anyway, since you need to avail this loan, you have to make sure that your clinic will have a steady flow of great income. Thus, best of luck and bless your team to perform your utmost duty always.

I Googled Forest Outings Cafe and it looks like a beautiful forest garden inside a building. I wonder how they can grow all the plants in this pretty place. I am sure that your ladies enjoy the ambiance and the serenity of this cafe. Too bad, their food is not impressive as you have said. Well, for me, we have the best tasting coffee in the Philippines as it grows everywhere in our country. The place where I drink coffee matters as well. I like to have it at 'The Manor at Camp John Hay' sometimes. You can Google it too. ^^ Most of the time, and this weekend, my son and I will go to Starbucks at the mall to just enjoy our time. 

Thus, I enjoyed reading your light and inspiring composition. I am glad not to hear anyone resigning or leaving your clinic. Your composition has some very well stated sentences. Keep it up! Analyze and go over the suggestions to make your writing even more engaging.

I wish you a very good night.

-T. Donna~

Good evening.
>> Correct!

How was your symptom?
>> Correct!

No more cough?
>> Correct!

I hope you will be alright soon.
>> Correct!

At lunch break, we had a meeting with the bank men.
>> Correct!

They told us that we should pay high interest if we borrow lots of money from their bank.
>> They told us that we should pay a high interest if we borrow lots of money from their bank.

A chief of them talked about the reason of high interest.
>> Their chief talked about the reason of the high interest.

That's because of global exchange crisis due to the war between Russia and Ukraine.
>> That's because of the global exchange crisis due to the war between Russia and Ukraine.

Anyway, we need plenty of money, so we will borrow it from the bank consequently.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
 
Today's homework is about a cafe.
>> Correct!

There is STARBUCKS near both our clinic and my home.
>> Correct!

Most Korean prefer to go to SBuck; SBuck stands for STARBUCKS.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, there is a special cafe in the distance of 10 minutes from home.
>> Correct!
Or: Meanwhile, there is a special cafe 10 minutes from home.

The cafe's name is "Forest Outings", they have many trees and wide spaces.
>> Correct!

In addition, they serve coffee, tea, bread, pasta, and pizza.
>> Correct!

However, their foods and drinks are not excellent honestly.
>> Correct!
Or: However, their food and drinks are not excellent honestly.

I am getting used to a coffee in SBuck, but with my family, I'd rather go to Forest Outings.
>> Correct!

You can google it.
>> Correct!
Or: You can Google it.

See you.
>> Correct!
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