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Have you planned for your retirement? At what age should someone seriously plan their life after wor

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I have my plan my after work life. But It's just dream yet.
First I want to work 50 years old if I can.
I think after 50 may be hard to work in the office.
And actually I want to work at home in the futuer then I can work after 50.
When I retirement, I want to be a professor in the university.
Teaching student is my one of the dream job.
And I make my Youtube channel to show my work then I will be a freelancer.
And if I get old, I write the book and make the stories.
My stories will be making by movie.
And another plan option is setting up my cafe.
I think It's busier after retirement. In fact it's not a retirement.
It's starting the second life.

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Hello Eun Chae!
You have a nice plan after your retirement.  You also don't want to just take some rest.  But instead, you want help yourself and continue earning money.  Do something that will make you happy so you won't feel exhausted as you work at that old age. ^^


~T. Maine


I have my plan my after work life. 
>>I have my plan after my work life. 
But It's just dream yet.
>> But it's just a dream. 
First I want to work 50 years old if I can.
>> First, I want to work until 50 years old if I can. 
I think after 50 may be hard to work in the office.
>> I think working after 50 may be hard in the office. 
And actually I want to work at ho
me in the futuer then I can work after 50.
>> And actually, I want to work at home in the future so I can work after 50. 
When I retirement, I want to be a professor in the university.
>> When I retire, I want to be a professor at a university. 
Teaching student is my one of the dream job.
>> Teaching is one of my dream jobs. 
And I make my Youtube channel to show my work then I will be a freelancer.
>> I will make a YouTube channel to show my work and become a freelancer. 
And if I get old, I write the book and make the stories.
>> And if I get old, I will write a book and make stories. 
My stories will be making by movie.
>> My stories will be made into a movie. 
And another plan option is setting up my cafe.
>> My other plan is to set up a cafe. 
I think It's busier after retirement. 
>> Correct. 
In fact it's not a retirement.
>> In fact, it's not a retirement. 
It's starting the second life.
>> It's the start of my second life. 

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