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Recently I feel the young genreation are too timid and passive.

There are many kinds of works and jobs in the world.

When they are young it is possible to attemt anything.

Even though they fail some works, it is not just failure.

Ir is good experences for live.

Unfortunately they are interested in investing in stocks and coins , buying houses and good brand items.

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Hello there, Ms. Lily!
I guess, it's really hard to handle young generation because they tend to follow their own will. However, we can be their guide and their consultants so that they will not be wasting their whole life waiting.
Have a great afternoon!
Aki~

Recently I feel the young genreation are too timid and passive.
>>> Recently I feel the young generation is too timid and passive.

There are many kinds of works and jobs in the world.
>>> There are many kinds of work and jobs in the world.

When they are young it is possible to attemt anything.
>>> While they are young it is possible to attempt to do anything.

Even though they fail some works, it is not just failure.
>>> Even though they fail on some work, they should not focus on failure.

Ir is good experences for live.
>>>  It is a good experience to live.

Unfortunately, they are interested in investing in stocks and coins , buying houses and good brand items.
>>>  Unfortunately,  they are more interested in investing in stocks and coins, buying houses, and good-brand items.
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