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What is the worst disaster in your opinion? Share your answer in a few sentences.

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I realized the worst disaster to human being is the war when I heard what was happened in Ukraine. It left many casualties and collapsed buildings. Men were forced to enlist in the army, and women were raped by the enemy. It shows how creulty looks like and must not be begun.

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Good evening, Judy!

You are right about this man-made disaster. Raging war kills so many people from both parties. Surely, there is no winner in this case. Due to the leader's desire of stronger power, s/he places countries in peril. This is unimaginable during the 21st Century. Nevertheless, we hope that the war will end soonest.

Below are my grammar suggestions. Read each sentence carefully and spot the difference.

See you in class tomorrow!

-T. Donna~

I realized the worst disaster to human being is the war when I heard what was happened in Ukraine. 
>> I realized that the worst disaster to human beings is war when I heard what was happening in Ukraine. 

It left many casualties and collapsed buildings. 
>> Correct!

Men were forced to enlist in the army, and women were raped by the enemy. 
>> Correct!

It shows how creulty looks like and must not be begun.
>> it shows how cruelty looks like and must not continue.


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