¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What do you think is the worst invention of the mankind? (weapon, atomic energy, cigarettes, televis

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ·ù*ÁÖ
2022-10-18 2207

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I think the worst invention of the mankind is a gun.
We can protect ourselves from other weapons such as knives or hammers if we know how to protect ourselves from them.
But in the case of guns, it is not easy to protect ourselves from them.
Because of this, a lot of people nowadays are dying by them because they can't protect themselves.
Because of this reason, I think the guns are the worst thing that humans made.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello John!
You're right! I agree that guns should not be used by humans at all. See you in our next class! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I think the worst invention of the mankind is a gun.
>>I think the worst invention of mankind is the gun.
We can protect ourselves from other weapons such as knives or hammers if we know how to protect ourselves from them.
>>CORRECT!
But in the case of guns, it is not easy to protect ourselves from them.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this, a lot of people nowadays are dying by them because they can't protect themselves.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this reason, I think the guns are the worst things that humans made.
>>CORRECT!
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
125216 Homework from the Feedback (5) ¹Ú*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 693
125215 What are the good study habits in your opinion? ÀÓ*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 548
125214 The actors make the movie great. ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 633
125213 What comes to mind when you think about your future? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 640
125212 Homework ¼Û*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 3
125211 ¿µÀÛ ¼÷Á¦ ÀÌ*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 0
125210 homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 0
125209 HOMEWORK È«*¼± ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 782
125208 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 0
125207 HOMEWORK È«*¼± ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 3
125206 Tuesday Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 516
125205 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 0
125204 We can improve ¹Ú*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 828
125203 Homework ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 2
125202 Gathering you last attended. ±è*¼ø ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 654
125201 Do you agree that married young women with higher earned income... Ȳ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 602
125200 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 1
125199 My homework Àü*¼± ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 572
125198 Lesson 2 : Homework ±è*Çý ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 521
125197 30.Jan.2023 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-31 1

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04