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What do you think is the worst invention of the mankind? (weapon, atomic energy, cigarettes, televis

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I think the worst invention of the mankind is a gun.
We can protect ourselves from other weapons such as knives or hammers if we know how to protect ourselves from them.
But in the case of guns, it is not easy to protect ourselves from them.
Because of this, a lot of people nowadays are dying by them because they can't protect themselves.
Because of this reason, I think the guns are the worst thing that humans made.

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Hello John!
You're right! I agree that guns should not be used by humans at all. See you in our next class! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I think the worst invention of the mankind is a gun.
>>I think the worst invention of mankind is the gun.
We can protect ourselves from other weapons such as knives or hammers if we know how to protect ourselves from them.
>>CORRECT!
But in the case of guns, it is not easy to protect ourselves from them.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this, a lot of people nowadays are dying by them because they can't protect themselves.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this reason, I think the guns are the worst things that humans made.
>>CORRECT!
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