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There are many date courses in South Korea.
I think most of the people spend time being in the restaurant and cafe during dates.
They find fancy and famous restaurant from research and eat signature menu.
After eating lunch or dinner, they go to cafe, drink some coffee and desert and chat togeter.
Going to theaters or exhibition is the common date course.
Also, people enjoy various activities.
Exercise together is the good way to increase intimacy.
If they like to watch sports game, they will enjoy going to the stadium.
Especially, baseball stadium is a preferred date spots for lovers.
People who like to travel leave for the new place.
In my oplinion, how to date in South Korea is not different from other countires.
It gives them happiness just doing simple activity togethera and sharing interests.

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Good morning once again. Dr. Stella!

You are absolutly right! Dating can be similar to most countries in the world. After all, romance is a universal feeling. Basically, a common interest is enjoyable to do depending on how adventurous or open a date is to the counterparts plans. 

My grammar suggestion here on your wittily written answer are the use of the article of 'a' as a non-specific determiner. Also, look closely to the spelling of 'together'. Finally, the plural form of nouns are used to refer to general things such as, "We like things." 

Then, thank you for your constant hard work and dedication of your time in improving your speaking and writing skills in English!

See you again next week, take care!

-T. Donna~

There are many date courses in South Korea.
>> Correct!

I think most of the people spend time being in the restaurant and cafe during dates.
>> Correct!

They find fancy and famous restaurant from research and eat signature menu.
>> They find fancy and famous restaurants from their research and eat signature menus.

After eating lunch or dinner, they go to cafe, drink some coffee and desert and chat togeter.
>> After eating lunch or dinner, they go to a cafe, drink some coffee and desert and chat together.

Going to theaters or exhibition is the common date course.
>> Correct!

Also, people enjoy various activities.
>> Correct!

Exercise together is the good way to increase intimacy.
>> Exercising together is a good way to increase intimacy.

If they like to watch sports game, they will enjoy going to the stadium.
>> Correct!

Especially, baseball stadium is a preferred date spots for lovers.
>> Especially, baseball stadium is a preferred date spot for lovers.
Or: A baseball stadium is an especially preferred date spot for lovers.

People who like to travel leave for the new place.
>> People who like to travel leave for a new place.

In my oplinion, how to date in South Korea is not different from other countires.
>> Correct!

It gives them happiness just doing simple activity togethera and sharing interests.
>>  It gives them happiness just doing simple activities together and sharing interests.
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