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2022-10-13 1885

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Good afternoon, T. Donna.
I was so depressed last night.
That's because the marketing manager resigned yesterday, and she seemed to be so happy, while I felt bad.
Of course, I could understood her mind.
But, I felt myself stupid, and I was disappointed with myself.
Since I am a CEO, I have to stay away from my private emotion about work and staff.
In addition, there were too many paperworks yesterday, and I couldn't be concentrated on those because of my feeling.
One more thing, my computer broke down.
Yesterday was the worst day among these days.
I told my wife about the situation, and then she made me some foods for whiskey.
I drank much, so I got sleep too late.
That's why I put off my class today.
I apologize for this work.
However, I got up at 6:30 AM without hangover.
I should have joined the class today.
My mother always say. "Don't trust anyone. Don't rely on anybody. Just trust in God."
That is necessary to me now, I think.
Time heals the wounds.
Have a nice day. See you.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!

I am so sorry to hear about your very stressful day yesterday. Finally, after all of the convincing and kind  conversation you had to let her stay, she still left. However, she should never have shown that she was happy to leave- this is unprofessional.

Anyway, I had a very rough day as well yesterday. I will tell you all about it in class. I thought I was going to have some heart attack. ^^ Nevertheless, I am still here, checking and reading your essay. By now, I am fine.

Regarding putting off your class, I understand, I hope by now you are feeling better. Today, I walked long distance, went to the mall, and to the City Hall to fix some documents so I feel so good. Sometimes, a good me-time is all we need.

Anyway, your mom is right. God is always faithful and we will never leave our side. When everybody else does, he is still there. So, let's keep the faith. Of course, we need to help ourselves as well in return.

Thank you for sending me this homework. there are just a few grammar suggestions and I like the manner of your exposition for its clarity and criticalness. Study my suggestions as well.

See you tomorrow when you are feeling better. Good night.

-T. Donna~

Good afternoon, T. Donna.
>> Correct!

I was so depressed last night.
>> Correct!

That's because the marketing manager resigned yesterday, and she seemed to be so happy, while I felt bad.
>> Correct!

Of course, I could understood her mind.
>> Correct!
Or: Of course, I can understood her mind.

But, I felt myself stupid, and I was disappointed with myself.
>> Correct!

Since I am a CEO, I have to stay away from my private emotion about work and staff. 
>> Correct!

In addition, there were too many paperworks yesterday, and I couldn't be concentrated on those because of my feeling.
>> In addition, there were too many paperworks yesterday, and I couldn't  concentrate on those because of my feelings.

One more thing, my computer broke down.
>> Correct!

Yesterday was the worst day among these days.
>> Correct!
Or: Yesterday was the worst day ever.

I told my wife about the situation, and then she made me some foods for whiskey.
>> Correct!

I drank much, so I got sleep too late.
>> I drank much, so I went  to sleep too late.

That's why I put off my class today.
>> Correct!

I apologize for this work.
>> Correct!

However, I got up at 6:30 AM without hangover.
>> Correct!

I should have joined the class today.
>> Correct!

My mother always say. "Don't trust anyone.
>> My mother always says, "Don't trust anyone.

Don't rely on anybody. Just trust in God."
>> Correct!

That is necessary to me now, I think.
>> Correct!

Time heals the wounds.
>> Correct!

Have a nice day. See you.
>> Correct!

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