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When I have a blind date, I usually find common interests with a person.
In my opinion, talking about common interests is the best way to break the ice.
Exercise, movies, music, and travel are good themes of stories.
I like to talk about travel that I went before and also enjoy listening other's experiences of journey.
It is very exciting to share experiences of good and bad things in travel.
Because I enjoy watching dramas in my rest time, I used to recommend dramas which I was impressed by and I love to be recommended by others.
Weather, atmosphere of the restaurant, and taste of food are simple topics to start the conversation.
In conclusion, by talkng with other people, I get the personality of him and have a good connection with him.

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Hello, good day, Dr. Stella!

I think you have all of the experiences of a lind date. Below, you used very good idioms as 'break the ice' among many other expressions to tell how to engage in a conversation. Moreover, your sentence structures were almost all correct. In some sentences, you had your own style of stating your sentences but then the suggestions I made can show you some of the usual structures in everday use.

Your composition is packed with examples as well as experiences. You can speak well due to your experiences. Thank you for sharing these here on your homework answer and I will see you on the next composition.

Have a very good day! See you soon!

-T. Donna~

When I have a blind date, I usually find common interests with a person.
>> Correct!

In my opinion, talking about common interests is the best way to break the ice.
>> Correct! Very good expression!

Exercise, movies, music, and travel are good themes of stories.
>> Correct!

I like to talk about travel that I went before and also enjoy listening other's experiences of journey.
>> I like to talk about travel  to places where I went before and also enjoy listening to other's experiences of journey.

It is very exciting to share experiences of good and bad things in travel.
>> Correct!

Because I enjoy watching dramas in my rest time, I used to recommend dramas which I was impressed by and I love to be recommended by others.
>> Correct! 

Weather, atmosphere of the restaurant, and taste of food are simple topics to start the conversation.
>> Weather, atmosphere of the restaurant, and the taste of food are simple topics to start the conversation.

In conclusion, by talkng with other people, I get the personality of him and have a good connection with him.
>> Correct!
Or: In conclusion, by talkng with the other person, I get his personality and have a good connection with him.
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