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I have had a blind date several times.
It's interesting to meet new people who share common interest with me,.
However, I don't enjoy a blind date because it's akward to deal with person about whom I don't have few information.
When I meet someone in a blind date, I try to find common interests with them.
I think It's best to start talking about hobbies or movies.
Occupation is one of the main theme of stories.
If he has a doctor, It's good to understand each other because doctor has distinct occupational characteristics different from other jobs.
It's also interesting to listen to story of someone who has different job with me.
I cound't understand their worklife, but it's very awesome and funny because I don't experience that.

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Hello, Dr. Stella!

It's great to have you back here on the composition page! I have never had a blind date before and understanding it from your culture and perspective is very interesting to find out. What wields a good connection and a good first impression is truly the common traits you have. Establishing yourself is less and enjoying the moment is probably the first step. As you have stressed, being a doctor may be a common interest but other fields of interest may be delightful as well.

I enjoyed reading your homework since it was written in a very clear, concise, and inductive way. The grammar suggestions will guide you to some patterns and pointers to make your sentences even better. Kindly read through.

Excellent output! See you in class soon.

-T. Donna~

I have had a blind date several times.
>> Correct!

It's interesting to meet new people who share common interest with me,.
>> Correct!
Or: It's interesting to meet new people who share common interests with me.

However, I don't enjoy a blind date because it's akward to deal with person about whom I don't have few information.
>> However, I don't enjoy a blind date because it's akward to deal with a person whom I have few information.

When I meet someone in a blind date, I try to find common interests with them.
>> When I meet someone in a blind date, I try to find common interests with him.

I think It's best to start talking about hobbies or movies.
>> Correct!

Occupation is one of the main theme of stories.
>> Correct!

If he has a doctor, It's good to understand each other because doctor has distinct occupational characteristics different from other jobs.
>> If he is a doctor, it's good to understand each other because a doctor has a distinct occupational characteristics different from other jobs.

It's also interesting to listen to story of someone who has different job with me.
>> It's also interesting to listen to stories of someone who has a different job with me.

I cound't understand their worklife, but it's very awesome and funny because I don't experience that.
>> Correct!
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