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Smoking is one of the serious reasons to spoil our health in many ways. It causes many illnesses such as lung cancer, pneumonia, asthma and even for children's health. Especially, for non-smokers, smelling the cigarettes is really annoying that's why they will be well come that policy.
However, from my perspective, if smokers cannot smoke suddenly by government or legally, they will undergo frustrating and embarrassing. This is because, even though it is the best way to keep our health, banning is not helpful for the public as it is related to the free of the people. To ban something to people for good is impossible.
Apart from that, people would find out another way to enjoy their taste despite of the smoking.

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