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Hello, T. Donna.
It's Friday!
I love this day, because weekend is coming soon.
On weekends, I can be free from my work, staff problem, and demanding clients.
Actually, I had a cheating day just before.
Dr. MJ, Dr. Jung(his wife who are also doctor) and I went to a new restaurant.
They served a crispy boiled pork for main dish there.
It was great.
I've never experienced the taste like that.
Of course I drunk, only one glass of highball.
As we ate the food, we discussed about the morning conference tomorrow.
As you know, there are many new members in the clinic, and some of them are rude and look down on the manager.
Thus, we decided to declare whoever break the rule and have no manners should be punished.
Anyway, today's homework is about if the commercials are important.
Definitely, yes!
How can we inform our name or services to people without commercials?
We are exposed to large amounts of advertising everyday.
And then, we get used to something without notice.
Have a nice weekend~

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Good evening, Dr. Kim! Happy Saturday.

Thank God, it's another weekend indeed! Although I am so beat today, I am extremely happy to work on the radio, decorate my home , clean up, go to town twice, feed my dog, do the laundry, and more! My back hurts but I will be fine. 

Anyway, Cheat day is needed to take a respite from diet. The trick is to just move and stay active, so carry your third daughter or the three of them to shed some calories. ^^ Well, I am sure that the food was exquisite since you described it as like no other. In the Philippines, we have a similar dish of the pork you mentioned. It is very crispy and so soft inside , it melts! The cooking time however can take a total of three hours or more. At least you are getting better with your drinking habit. 

Your rules and guidelines sound very reasonable. I hope that clinic staff will behave professionally and respect one another. If most of them are women, it may be difficult but it is achievable if they keep themselves busy instead of creating trouble.

And now for the homework answer, if commercials truly matter, then why do people subscribe to YouTube Premium to avoid them? Why do we 'skip' them and avoid watching them on television? Maybe there are just too many commercials and advertisements that we get fed up seeing them over and over again.

For your overall composition, I must say that you have shared so much at your journal part and your sentences were written in a straightforward and very clear manner. Also, your transitions were so smooth that they led one idea to another systematically. Then, my grammar suggestions are the use of correct comma placements, pluralizing nouns for general mention, subject-verb agreement, among other.

You have done a very good job, keep writing.

Enjoy your Sunday with your lovely ladies!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T. Donna.
>> Correct!

It's Friday!
>> Correct!

I love this day, because weekend is coming soon.
>> Correct!
Or: Remove the comma.

On weekends, I can be free from my work, staff problem, and demanding clients.
>> Correct!
Or: On weekends, I can be free from my work, staff problems, and demanding clients.

Actually, I had a cheating day just before.
>> Actually, I had a cheat day earlier.

Dr. MJ, Dr. Jung(his wife who are also doctor) and I went to a new restaurant.
>> Dr. MJ, Dr. Jung(his wife who is also a doctor), and I went to a new restaurant.

They served a crispy boiled pork for main dish there.
>> Correct!

It was great.
>> Correct!

I've never experienced the taste like that.
>> I've never experienced a taste like that.

Of course I drunk, only one glass of highball.
>> Of course, I drunk only one glass of highball.

As we ate the food, we discussed about the morning conference tomorrow.
>> Correct!

As you know, there are many new members in the clinic, and some of them are rude and look down on the manager.
>> Correct!

Thus, we decided to declare whoever break the rule and have no manners should be punished.
>> Thus, we decided to declare whoever breaks the rule and have no manners should be punished.

Anyway, today's homework is about if the commercials are important.
>> Anyway, today's homework is about commercials being important.

Definitely, yes!
>> Correct!

How can we inform our name or services to people without commercials?
>> Correct!

We are exposed to large amounts of advertising everyday.
>> Correct!

And then, we get used to something without notice.
>> Correct!
Or: And then, we get used to something unconsciously.

Have a nice weekend~
>> Correct!
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