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What benefits and drawbacks do you think working abroad has?

작성자: 김*경
2022-09-29 1507

회원님의 영작문

Working abroad has benefits as the following:
Firstly, you have a chance to experience working with people from other cultures and languages. It helps you extend your understanding of the world, or get more chances to improve your abilities, such as communication skills with foreigners. Second, you can travel around the world for nothing. I think your airfare, stay expenses, or any expenses that you need while you work abroad will be supported by your company.

Working abroad has drawbacks as the following:
People with wives or children in Korea will have trouble staying away for your staying abroad. Sometimes, I saw people living apart from their families for a long time ending up getting severely depressed or even committing suicide. In high competitive society, the presence of people behind you like family helps you keep healthy life physically and mentally. Working in strange environments for a long time may make you run down.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Steve! (^_^)

Spending a year working abroad has numerous benefits, including the chance to experience a new culture and save money. You'll also make new friends and discover new foods and ways of thinking as you fearlessly step into the unknown.

However, it's challenging to effortlessly integrate into a completely new culture with all of its varied social customs and work practices.

Naturally, it will be more difficult if you don't know the language well, but even if you do, you'll encounter new words, phrases, and methods of speaking that will throw you off balance. It's challenging to feel like an outsider in your new place, and you'll be continually reminded of how you don't fit in.

Thank you for accomplishing your homework. Have a good night!^^

__T. Mayleen :)


Working abroad has benefits as the following:
>>> The benefits of working about are the following:
Firstly, you have a chance to experience working with people from other cultures and languages.
>>> CORRECT
It helps you extend your understanding of the world, or get more chances to improve your abilities, such as communication skills with foreigners. Second, you can travel around the world for nothing.
>>> It helps you extend your understanding of the world or get more chances to improve your abilities, such as communication skills with foreigners. Second, you can travel around the world for nothing.
>>> OR: It gives you additional opportunities to broaden your worldview or develop your talents, including your ability to communicate with people from other cultures. Second, it is free to travel anywhere in the world.
I think your airfare, stay expenses, or any expenses that you need while you work abroad will be supported by your company.
>>> I think your airfare, accommodation, or any expenses that you need while you work abroad will be shouldered by your company.

Working abroad has drawbacks as the following:
>>> The drawbacks of working about are the following:
People with wives or children in Korea will have trouble staying away for your staying abroad.
>>> People with wives or children in Korea will have trouble staying away during your stay abroad.
Sometimes, I saw people living apart from their families for a long time ending up getting severely depressed or even committing suicide.
>>> Sometimes, I saw people living apart from their families for a long time, ending up getting severely depressed or even committing suicide.
>>> OR: I've occasionally witnessed folks who have spent a long time distant from their families become gravely depressed or even commit suicide.
In high competitive society, the presence of people behind you like family helps you keep healthy life physically and mentally.
>>> In a highly competitive society, the presence of people behind you like family helps you keep a healthy life physically and mentally.
Working in strange environments for a long time may make you run down.
>>> Long-term work in unfamiliar locations might wear you out.
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