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Hello.
Today's work in our clinic finished too late because of important meeting.
Our clinic manager and chief nurse proposed many things for the clinic, so Dr. MJ and I had to go over those.
And then, We were totally exhausted, so we ate 'samgyupsal' to recharge our energy.
It means the failure of diet today. LOL
Actually I am not full, thus I really want more foods, but I should endure.
Today's homework is about the differences between cars in Korea and those in other countries.
There are two big companies related car in Korea; Hyundai and KIA.
Those companies have a wonderful skill to make lots of cars.
Cars made by Korea are comfortable and have many functions, and they have a wide range of expense; I mean there are both cheep and expensive cars in Korea.
However, I think Germany cars and Sweden cars are better in performance and safety. But most of them are expensive and we can hardly find A/S center in some areas.
Which brand do you like better about car?
See you tomorrow.

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Good day, Dr. Kim!

It was a busy Tuesday for you. Maybe this day too. Nevertheless, have a productive one with your new members.

Cheat day during diet can be tricky. So, the solution here is not to eat too much today. I cannot help eating too much too so, I make cheat day twice a week sometimes. ^^ Balancing our happiness with food and our health is never easy after all.

Well, thank you for sharing much about cars in class. Here on your homework, you talked about the disadvantage of imported cars which has service inaccessibility and it is true as well with the other car parts. But then, realiablity is strong and efficient. For whichever car we choose, it will always need a responsible owner for its maintenance over time. To answer your question, I prefer imported cars like the BMW just like my bosses and yours.

Then, excellent job on your composition! There are a some grammar suggestions contain some insertion of articles, correct preposition, proper pluralization, syntax (correct choice of words), among others. Kindly and patiently go over them below.

Have a wonderful day!

-T.Donna~ 

Today's work in our clinic finished too late because of important meeting.
>> Today's work in our clinic finished too late because of an important meeting.

Our clinic manager and chief nurse proposed many things for the clinic, so Dr. MJ and I had to go over those.
>> Correct!
Or: Our clinic manager and chief nurse proposed many things to the clinic, so Dr. MJ and I had to go over those.

And then, We were totally exhausted, so we ate 'samgyupsal' to recharge our energy.
>> Correct:
Or: We -> we

It means the failure of diet today. 
LOL
>> Correct!

Actually I am not full, thus I really want more foods, but I should endure.
>> Actually, I was not full, thus I really wanted more food, but I should endure.

Today's homework is about the differences between cars in Korea and those in other countries.
>> Correct!

There are two big companies related car in Korea; Hyundai and KIA.
>> Correct!

Those companies have a wonderful skill to make lots of cars.
>> Those companies have wonderful skills to make lots of cars.

Cars made by Korea are comfortable and have many functions, and they have a wide range of expense; I mean there are both cheep and expensive cars in Korea.
>> Cars made by Korea are comfortable and have many functions, and they have a wide range of options; I mean there are both cheap and expensive cars.

However, I think Germany cars and Sweden cars are better in performance and safety. 
>> However, I think German cars and Sweden cars are better in performance and safety. 

But most of them are expensive and we can hardly find A/S center in some areas.
>> Correct!

Which brand do you like better about car?
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!

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