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I coudln't forget about 2022 Worldcup.
It was the first Worldcup which was held in Korea, and most of the Korean anticipated about the games.
Korean soccer team was not a strong team, and they were just expected to do top 16.
However, they showed a great job, and acheived to do semi-final.
Hiddink, head coach of the Korean soccer team, and the Korean players won the games when they were in the crisis.
It was famous for street cheering in Korea.
Many Korean joined in park and street, and they cheered the Korean team together watching big size television and wearing red-colored T-shirts.
Later, milions of people were joined in Gwangwhamun Plaza and cheered together,
Several freign presses saw these scenes interesting and reported these supporting.

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Hi there, Dr. Stella!

The World Cup is definitely one that places South Korea in the map especially during the year 2002. As you have described it was intense and action packed. There was an amazing energy from that moment that makes it so unforgettable. 

Your composition makes me think that you truly love sports. You captured the scenario of that time and also gave distinct moments of your experience. Thank you for sharing this awesome memory.

Study the suggestions made to some of your sentences. Thank you for all of your hard work as always!

See you soon!

-T. Donna~

I coudln't forget about 2022 Worldcup.
>> I coudln't forget about the 2002 World Cup.

It was the first Worldcup which was held in Korea, and most of the Korean anticipated about the games.
>> It was the first World Cup which was held in Korea, and most of the Koreans anticipated the games.

Korean soccer team was not a strong team, and they were just expected to do top 16.
>> U Korean soccer team was not a strong team, and they were just expected to make it on top 16.

However, they showed a great job, and acheived to do semi-final.
>> However, they showed a great job, and acheived to make it on the semi-final.

Hiddink, head coach of the Korean soccer team, and the Korean players won the games when they were in the crisis.
>> Correct!
Or: crisis= crunch time

It was famous for street cheering in Korea.
>> Correct!

Many Korean joined in park and street, and they cheered the Korean team together watching big size television and wearing red-colored T-shirts.
>> Many Koreans joined in the parks and streets, and they cheered on the Korean team together, watching on big size television and wearing red-colored t-shirts.

Later, milions of people were joined in Gwangwhamun Plaza and cheered together,
>> Later, milions of people joined at Gwangwhamun Plaza and cheered altogether.

Several freign presses saw these scenes interesting and reported these supporting.
>> Several foreign press saw these scenes and got interested and reported this kind of support.
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