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There are several people whom I could get advice from.
When I have a problem with work, I ask for help from co-workers and seniors.
If I encounter a worrying situation regarding lifestyle, I tell the situation to my friends and family.
It depends on the situation who I ask for help, but, my mother is the best person that I can count on.
Whenever I have a problem, I ask for advice from my mother, and she always gives me a wonderful solution.
Sometimes I feel better when I just talk about stressful events to her.
She is very smart, have experienced many situations for a long time, and knows me very well.
So, she is able to give me proper counseling.
I want to be a person like my mother who someone can count on when they are in a bad situation.
I try to feel empathy and give the best advice to them when someone ask me to consel.

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Hi there,Dr. Stella!

You are lucky to have a mother who has such wide range of experience and wisdom. It is true that giving a good advice is only achieved when one had an experience.Thus, listen to her and decide on taking her advice.

As evident on the evaluation below, you only had some grammar suggestion at the last sentence. Congratulations for an excellent work done! I admire your effort in always coming up with top class work.

See you later!

-T. Donna~
There are several people whom I could get advice from.
>> Correct!

When I have a problem with work, I ask for help from co-workers and seniors.
>> Correct!

If I encounter a worrying situation regarding lifestyle, I tell the situation to my friends and family.
>> Correct!

It depends on the situation who I ask for help, but, my mother is the best person that I can count on.
>> Correct!

Whenever I have a problem, I ask for advice from my mother, and she always gives me a wonderful solution.
>> Correct!

Sometimes I feel better when I just talk about stressful events to her.
>> Correct!

She is very smart, have experienced many situations for a long time, and knows me very well.
>> Correct!

So, she is able to give me proper counseling.
>> Correct!

I want to be a person like my mother who someone can count on when they are in a bad situation.
>> Correct!

I try to feel empathy and give the best advice to them when someone ask me to consel.
>> I try to feel empathy and give the best advice to them when someone asks me for counsel.
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