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What was the most memorable lesson your grandparents taught you?

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2022-09-25 1316

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The most memorable lesson my grandparents had taught me is actually a myth that teaches something. Mother and Father always says that I did not do anything bad when I was with my grandparents. So I suppose they had nothing to teach me. Anyway, they told me htis story ; The Rich Millionare who Begged for a Tiny Bit of Rice Cake. I really did love this funny story so I wanted to tell you my short version of that in case it is too long. < The Rich Millionare who Begged for a Tiny Bit of Rice Cake ; There was a VERY rich millionare. But he only adored his money even more than his grandchildren. So his grandchildren hated him. The Rich Millionare suddenly saw a huge cumulonimbus cloud even before the rich millionare had a time to escape, the great calamity arrived. So, the Rich Millionare's money, house, ciothes all washed away while the now Once-millionare wept. Now the Once-millionare always begged around for the tiniest bit of rice cake.> This story teaches us to BE KIND!!! Take Care~❣

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Hello Heather! Thank you for making your composition. I really appreciate your effort. Keep up the good work! ~T. Lyn
The most memorable lesson my grandparents had taught me is actually a myth that teaches something. 
>>The most memorable lesson my grandparents taught me is actually a myth that teaches something.
Mother and Father always says that I did not do anything bad when I was with my grandparents. 
>>Mother and Father always remind me to not do anything bad when I am with my grandparents. 
So I suppose they had nothing to teach me. 
>>So, I supposed they don't have anything to teach me.
Anyway, they told me htis story ; The Rich Millionare who Begged for a Tiny Bit of Rice Cake. 
>>However, my grandparents told me a story about "The Rich Millionaire who Begged for a Tiny Bit of Rice Cake."
I really did love this funny story so I wanted to tell you my short version of that in case it is too long. 
>>I really loved this story because it's funny and I wanted to tell you the summary of it.
< The Rich Millionare who Begged for a Tiny Bit of Rice Cake ; 
>>The story of "The Rich Millionaire who Begged for a Tiny Bit of Rice Cake.
There was a VERY rich millionare. 
>>There was a man who was a very rich millionaire.
But he only adored his money even more than his grandchildren. 
>>He only adored his money more than his grandchildren.
So his grandchildren hated him. 
>>Correct.
The Rich Millionare suddenly saw a huge cumulonimbus cloud even before the rich millionare had a time to escape, the great calamity arrived. 
>>Before the rich millionaire could escape, he suddenly saw a huge cumulonimbus cloud, and catastrophe or the great calamity came.
So, the Rich Millionare's money, house, ciothes all washed away while the now Once-millionare wept. 
>>So the rich millionaire's money, house, and clothes were all washed away and now he wept. 
Now the Once-millionare always begged around for the tiniest bit of rice cake.> 
>>And now, the man who used to be a rich millionaire always begged around for the tiniest bit of rice cake.
This story teaches us to BE KIND!!! 
>>Correct. This story teaches us kindness!
Take Care~
>>Correct.
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