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ESSAY: Men and women can never share the same responsibilities at home and in everyday life. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

I disagree with that men and women can never share the same responsibilites at home and in everday life.
Men and women have to have tha same responsiblities at home and day life.
Long time agao, women had to do all the house chore and take care of their children alone because men made money for a living.
But now, women work also therefore men and women have to share house chore.
Thinking of that house chore is for women is very outdated.
In my case, My husband and I share house chore,
When I cook meals, he wahes dishes
When he cleans house with vuccum cleaner, I clean bathrooms.
What else? I am sure that he works more than I do at home. hahahha

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Hi there Ms. Eunice! ^^ I'm grateful for you are diligent in coming up your outputs. I and my husband do the same as well. We share with the house chores and we are doing them with no complains. My husband knows that I don't want dishes in the sink so sometimes when he eats, he washes the dishes right away. He also enjoys hanging clothes when we do the laundry. And he loves cooking too! I am so lucky to have him! Hahaha!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I disagree with that men and women can never share the same responsibilities at home and in every day life.
>>> CORRECT
Men and women have to have tha same responsiblities at home and day life.
>>> Men and women have to have the same responsibilities at home on a daily basis. 
Long time ago, women had to do all the house chores and had to take care of their children alone because men had to make money for living.
>>> CORRECT
But now, women work also therefore men and women have to share house chore.
>>> But nowadays, women also work, therefore men and women have to share house with the chores.
Thinking of that house chore is for women is very outdated.
>>> Thinking that house chores are only for women is very outdated.
In my case, My husband and I share house chore,
>>> In my case, my husband and I share with the house chores.
When I cook meals, he washes the dishes.
>>> CORRECT
When he cleans the house with vacuum cleaner, I clean the bathrooms.
>>> CORRECT
What else? I am sure that he works more than I do at home. hahahha
>>> CORRECT
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