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How would you maintain a good relationship with your family if you could only interact online?

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If I go to other regions in our country, or overseas on business, I could interact with my family only online. Perhaps, I would keep in touch with my family members as much as possible whenever I have spare time to talk with them. However, I wouldn't use it to check whether my children are doing good at school or not, or whether my wife is taking care of mischievous children well or not because my children and my wife may be offended by my spending this limited time foolishly or meaninlessly. We should utilize this precious time to express our love for each other.

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Good evening, Steve!
(^___^)

It's long been taught by the book of love, but now scientists suggest that absence truly does make the heart grow fonder, particularly when it comes to intimacy. Thus; constant communication is a must.

Online communication is often denigrated as a poor replacement of face-to-face time.
It¡¯s a digital world, and to ignore that would be foolish. The chief advantage of online communication is that both geography and time are relatively, if not completely, unimportant.

Thank you so much for this composition.
Have a good day!^^

__T. Mayleen :)


If I go to other regions in our country, or overseas on business, I could interact with my family only online.
>>> If I go to other regions in our country or overseas on business, I can interact with my family only online.
>>> OR: If I go for work to other parts of the county or abroad, I can only communicate with my family online.

Perhaps, I would keep in touch with my family members as much as possible whenever I have spare time to talk with them.
>>> Perhaps, I will keep in touch with my family members as much as possible whenever I have spare time to talk with them.

However, I wouldn't use it to check whether my children are doing good at school or not, or whether my wife is taking care of mischievous children well or not because my children and my wife may be offended by my spending this limited time foolishly or meaninlessly.
>>> However, I wouldn't use it to check whether my children are doing well at school or not, or whether my wife is taking care of our mischievous children well or not, because my children and my wife may be offended by my spending this limited time foolishly or meaninglessly.
>>> OR: However, I wouldn't use it to see if my kids are doing well in school or if my wife is taking good care of our wayward kids since I would anger them by wasting this precious time in a dumb or pointless manner.

We should utilize this precious time to express our love for each other.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: We should make the most of this valuable moment by showing each other how much we care.
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