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Homework

작성자: 김*우
2022-09-20 1592

회원님의 영작문

Hi, T Donna.
It's a peaceful day.
No one didn't quit.
And regarding the delay of construction, there seems to have a solution.
We did a contract with Doctor SW about selling current clinic.
And as you know, because of the delay, we can't keep the contract; we can't move our clinic on time without new building.
However, Fortunately, Doctor SW understood this situation and accepted the delay of contract day.
Meanwhile, we had another problem.
A clinic manager in our clinic told us that she will quit the job last weekend.
She is good at most of works in clinic except for the manners.
After I taught her about manners, she was getting good.
Thus, I am now satisfied with her.
Doctor MJ tried to change her mind, and succeeded.
This is my homework.
We can express our emotions with body languages.
If a staff do a good job, I can lift my thumb.
Also, when I talk to my patients about contraindication, I can make 'X' shape with my hands crossing.
Is there any special body language in your country?

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good evening, Dr. Kim!

Congratulations to a peaceful day! Sometimes, ordinary days are better than those when someone is quitting or there are some tension between staff. I hope that this mood lasts long. Also, it's a wonderful news to hear that Dr. SW was understanding and thinks in so much consideration of your contract day. You must be in luck! Most of all, your staff training is doing so well, so kudos to you and Dr. MJ!

Now for the homework part, in your country, there are so many body languages such as bowing, drinking alcohol towards the opposite side of the elderly, handing over things with two hands, among many others that I have encountered for teaching English for two decades. Your examples below are also used widely internationally with the same purpose and meaning. In our country, we have  a famous gesture of holding the hand of the old relatives or people and placing it on our forehead as a sign of respect but is now slowly dissipating due to modern ways of greeting. Even time can alter our gestures.

As I noted below, your use of semicolon was correct. You also made so many correct sentences as you were sharing details of your day in the office. So, kindly go over my suggestions in grammar as they were underscored for your convenience. You've done an excellent composition. Thank you for your consistent effort!

-T. Donna~

Hi, T Donna.
>> Correct!

It's a peaceful day.
>> Correct!

No one didn't quit.
>> Correct!

And regarding the delay of construction, there seems to have a solution.
>> And regarding the delay of the construction, there seems to be a solution.

We did a contract with Doctor SW about selling current clinic.
>> We did a contract with Doctor SW about selling the current clinic.

And as you know, because of the delay, we can't keep the contract; we can't move our clinic on time without new building.
>> And as you know, because of the delay, we can't keep the contract; we can't move our clinic on time without a new building. 
Awesome sentence using semicolon!

However, Fortunately, Doctor SW understood this situation and accepted the delay of contract day.
>> However, fortunately, Doctor SW understood this situation and accepted the delay of the contract day.

Meanwhile, we had another problem.
>> Correct!

A clinic manager in our clinic told us that she will quit the job last weekend.
>> Correct!

She is good at most of works in clinic except for the manners.
>> She is good at most of  the (work/tasks) in clinic except for her manners.

After I taught her about manners, she was getting good.
>> After I taught her about manners, she was getting better.

Thus, I am now satisfied with her.
>> Correct!

Doctor MJ tried to change her mind, and succeeded.
>> Correct!

This is my homework.
>> Correct!

We can express our emotions with body languages.
>> Correct!

If a staff do a good job, I can lift my thumb.
>> If a staff does a good job, I can lift my thumb.

Also, when I talk to my patients about contraindication, I can make 'X' shape with my hands crossing.
>> Also, when I talk to my patients about contraindication, I can make an 'X' shape with my hands crossing.

Is there any special body language in your country?
>> Correct!
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