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Which modifications to your nation\'s police force do you wish to see?

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Our national police force has changed a lot over the decades. I heard they used to be high-handed and asked for bribery obviously behind my time. However, now it is out of the question that they did before becasue various media in addition to citizens across the country are monitoring whether they are enforcing public power from people properly or not. Other than monitoring from the outside, they have been trying to improve themselves to be more responsible and close to people. Therefore, the Korean police force is now on the right track. I hope the Korean police force will keep going along like this.

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Good evening, Steve! ^^,)

The need for corrective action to curb police misconduct is heightened by the fact that public servants cannot engage in any questionable or reprehensible behavior.
The police have to come clean in the mirror of public opinion.

Thank you for accomplishing your homework. See you later in class!^^

__T. Mayleen :)


Our national police force has changed a lot over the decades.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: Over the years, our country's police force has seen significant development.
I heard they used to be high-handed and asked for bribery obviously behind my time.
>>> I heard they used to be high-handed and ask for bribery. Obviously, that was behind my time.
However, now it is out of the question that they did before becasue various media in addition to citizens across the country are monitoring whether they are enforcing public power from people properly or not.
>>> Now, though, it is impossible for them to continue as they did in the past since a variety of media outlets, as well as residents all around the nation, are keeping an eye on how effectively they are using public power.
Other than monitoring from the outside, they have been trying to improve themselves to be more responsible and close to people. Therefore, the Korean police force is now on the right track.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: In addition to keeping an eye on them from the outside, they have been working to become more dependable and sociable. As a result, the Korean police are currently moving in the correct direction.
I hope the Korean police force will keep going along like this.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: I'm hoping things will continue this way for the Korean police force.
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