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Do names shape our personality?

작성자: 안*비
2022-09-15 1649

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Every word meaning mother in the world always includes 'M' sound. Also, most word meaning father includes 'P' or 'F'. It cannot be coincidence.
Old people said, "Manner maketh man.", "A position decides behavior.", and "Clothes are such a wing which make a man look different." I think that names are clothes for our personalities.
In younger age, not every name matches with their face or image. But we can meet senior people easily who totally fit their name. It is because every moment we heard our name, our personalities and attitudes change and change.
In the same way, names also change our looks. A man owns tough name becomes tougher. The other way, A man owns soft name becomes softer. There can be exception like a tough guy with a girlish name. In my opnion, also the reason is not irrelevant to name's influence.
Freud always emphasized a role of unconsciousness, and hearing and listening is base of shaping it. So names, always being heard in our ears must be crucial in our life.

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Hi, Victoria!
I really appreciate that you always give your best when it comes to answering your homework. This is actually correct, sometimes names influence our behavior and personality. It can also be a way to show other people what they should expect from us.
-T. Caitlyn
Every word meaning mother in the world always includes 'M' sound. 
>> Words that mean mother in different countries always include the "M" sound.
Also, most word meaning father includes 'P' or 'F'. It cannot be coincidence.
>> CORRECT
Old people said, "Manner maketh man.", "A position decides behavior.", and "Clothes are such a wing which make a man look different." 
>> Old people usually say that Manner makes a man, or A position decided behavior or Clothes are such a wing which makes a man look different.
I think that names are clothes for our personalities.
>> CORRECT
In younger age, not every name matches with their face or image. But we can meet senior people easily who totally fit their name. 
>> For younger kids, their name might not match their face or image but as they get older, we can see that their name fits them,
It is because every moment we heard our name, our personalities and attitudes change and change.
>> It is because the moment we hear our names, our personalities and attitude continuously change.
In the same way, names also change our looks. 
>> CORRECT
A man owns tough name becomes tougher. The other way, A man owns soft name becomes softer. 
>> A man who has a tough name becomes tougher while a man with a soft name becomes softer.
There can be exception like a tough guy with a girlish name. 
>> There are also some exemptions like a tough guy with a girly name.
In my opnion, also the reason is not irrelevant to name's influence.
>> In my opinion, these are the reasons why names are relevant and influential.
Freud always emphasized a role of unconsciousness, and hearing and listening is base of shaping it. 
>> Freud always emphasized the role of unconsciousness, and hearing and listening are base for shaping it. 
So names, always being heard in our ears must be crucial in our life.
>> That is why names are crucial in our lives because we always hear them.
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