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Hi, T Donna.
As you might have expected, I was too busy today.
Fortunately three new members of yesterday came, but one of new members of today didn't come without any contact.
There are now 23 staffs in our clinic, and it is scheduled that another two members will join us tomorrow.
We don't have enough space for all staffs, and that problem won't be solved before the movement of our clinic.
Today's homework is about a divorce.
Do you know that many Koreans tend to be divorce so easily these days?
As a result, many young Koreans prefer to live alone.
It's the most serious problem in my country.
Anyway, if one of my friends who are so close to me consider to get a divorce, I will disagree with that at first.
First of all, I will make him to explain the reason.
If he has reasonable reasons and no child, I might agree with him.
As you know, all children need parents until they are grown up.
I hope that my children will meet good men and be good partners to them.
Catch you tomorrow.

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Hello, Dr. Kim!

I told you they will all come. What a lucky day indeed for your clinic. I never expected that there are 23 staff members in your clinic, that is a big number! Maybe your clinic is packed with people during peak hours. I hope that your movement to the new clinic will be fast tracked so that you can move better and be more comfortable in assisting your patients.

Anyway, divorce has become common nowadays and this includes your country. In my country, divorce is not allowed as annulment is the only available way legalize separation between two married couples. It is difficult to give a piece of advice to friends who want divorce but then if there is no hope for reconciliation in their relationship, then they are the ones who can decide about this life-changing matter. I am sure that you and your circle of friends are happily married and value marriage.

Now, your homework answer contains some syntax (word order) suggestions. Please read them well below. In addition, I deleted some unnecessary words to make the sentences shorter and even better. Thank you for all of your great effort in writing and sending this homework answer.

Good evening!

-T. Donna~

Hi, T Donna.
>> Correct!

As you might have expected, I was too busy today.
>> Correct!

Fortunately three new members of yesterday came, but one of new members of today didn't come without any contact.
>> Fortunately, the three new members from yesterday came but one of the new members didn't come today without any notice.

There are now 23 staffs in our clinic, and it is scheduled that another two members will join us tomorrow.
>> There are now 23 staffs in our clinic, and it is scheduled that the other two members will join us tomorrow.

We don't have enough space for all staffs, and that problem won't be solved before the movement of our clinic.
>> We don't have enough space for all staffs, and that problem won't be solved if we do not do the movement to our new clinic.

Today's homework is about a divorce.
>> Correct!

Do you know that many Koreans tend to be divorce so easily these days?
>> Correct!

As a result, many young Koreans prefer to live alone.
>> Correct!

It's the most serious problem in my country.
>> Correct!

Anyway, if one of my friends who are so close to me consider to get a divorce, I will disagree with that at first.
>> Correct!

First of all, I will make him to explain the reason.
>> First of all, I will make him explain the reason why.

If he has reasonable reasons and no child, I might agree with him.
>> Correct!
Or: If he has logical reasons and doesn't have a child, I might agree with him.

As you know, all children need parents until they are grown up.
>> Correct!

I hope that my children will meet good men and be good partners to them.
>> Correct!

Catch you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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