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When I got a sadness, I could treat my mood to listen to music like pop, lock and rap songs. Also, I have an aggressive thing to make me calm, if I have trouble things. Thanks for your teaching always kindly.

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Hello there, Elic! You're welcome, it's my pleasure to teach you every day. You are such an amazing student and it shows by how well you perform in class. Your progress motivates me to keep teaching and helping a lot of students. :) Please continue what you are doing, never give up on your dreams. Here are some of my corrections, please review them well. Have a nice day! :)


hen I got a sadness, I could treat my mood to listen to music like pop, lock and rap songs.
>> When I feel sadness, I treat myself by listening to pop & lock and rap music.
Also, I have an aggressive thing to make me calm, if I have trouble things.
>> Also, I can be aggressive sometimes when I get into trouble, I try my best to keep calm.
Thanks for your teaching always kindly.
>> Thanks for always teaching me kindly.
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