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describe how you celebrated Chuseok with your family. Use as many verbs as possible.

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When I saw my family after driving all the way to Busan, my family hugged each other and talked about many things to catch up on. We cooked Chuseok meals and had them together. This Chuseok, my younger brother prepared a video game console for children so that we could have more awesome times together.

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Good afternoon, Steve! ^-^)

Nothing compares to quality time spent with family.
Simple but joyful. We must develop the ability to enjoy the little things in life. A kiss, a smile, a blessing, good health, excellent companions, etc. There are many things for which to express gratitude.

Have a fun and safe weekend!

__T. Mayleen :)


When I saw my family after driving all the way to Busan, my family hugged each other and talked about many things to catch up on.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: I traveled all the way to Busan to see my family, and when I arrived, we all gave each other hugs and caught up on a lot of stuff.
We cooked Chuseok meals and had them together.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: We prepared Chuseok meals together and ate them.
This Chuseok, my younger brother prepared a video game console for children so that we could have more awesome times together.
>>> This Chuseok, my younger brother prepared a video game console for the children so that we could have more awesome times together.
>>> OR: In order for us to have more fun together this Chuseok, my younger brother arranged a gaming system for the kids.
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