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What are some of the advantages of cooking your meals at home? How about the disadvantages?

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When I cooking at home I can make a fresh and healthy food.
I can choose good ingredients personally so I could eat what I want. Cooking also can improve confidence. The more I cook the better my skills get. Also I can save my money. Eating out is expensive price.
But nowadays one person household is not easy to make food at hoom. It would be more expensive than eat out.
It is because, They only make just one dish. So the ingredient would be waste. And It's hard that make big dishes like pork belly or soup bacause they make just one people themselves.
When I finish the meal, I must clean the dishes and house it would be disadvantages.
So I want to enjoy to cooking at home rarely. It can change my feeling to happy and can eat delicious foods.

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Hello Chae!
It's right that there are more advantages when you eat out than cooking at home.  But you are more responsible when you do the cooking as safety is in your hands.  You also know which is healthy for your meal.  ^_^

~T. Maine

When I cooking at home I can make a fresh and healthy food.
>> When I cook at home, I can make fresh and healthy food. 
I can choose good ingredients personally so I could eat what I want. 
>> Correct.
Cooking also can improve confidence. 
>>Cooking can also improve my confidence. 
The more I cook the better my skills get. 
>> The more I cook, the better the skills I get. 
Also I can save my money. 
>> Correct. 
>> Or: I can also save some money. 
Eating out is expensive price.
>> Eating out is expensive. 
But nowadays one person household is not easy to make food at hoom. 
>> But nowadays, a one-person household is not that easy to prepare food at home. 
It would be more expensive than eat out.
>> Correct. 
It is because, They only make just one dish. 
>> It is because they only make one dish for the day. 
So the ingredient would be waste. 
>> So the ingredients would be wasted. 
And It's hard that make big dishes like pork belly or soup bacause they make just one people themselves.
>> And it's hard to make big dishes like pork belly or soup because I only make these for only one person, myself. 
When I finish the meal, I must clean the dishes and house it would be disadvantages.
>> When I finish the meal, I must clean the dishes and the house.  These would be the disadvantages. 
So I want to enjoy to cooking at home rarely. 
>> So I want to enjoy cooking at home rarely. 
It can change my feeling to happy and can eat delicious foods.
>>It can change my mood to happiness and I can enjoy the delicious food. 

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