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Some topics I avoid when I talk with someone for the first time

작성자: 안*비
2022-09-14 2535

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There is a proverb in Korea, "Politics and religion are never good topics, even at home." I can't help admiting it. Honestly, I regard it more important to share own opinion freely than to keep a shallow relationship.
But each restrict stance about the topics exsists everywhere. I usually hold my tongue, trying not to against someone's nerve.
Once you made a friendship with others, It is possible to overcome the diffences of political or religious view. How about first-met people? I don't have to listen to them. So are they. First impression also can be ruined due to prejudice.
I said sharing personal view is more important than maintaining superficial relationship. But potential in relationship is the most important part. I don't want to lose a chance to gain good friend tomorrow because of my bias today.
So I care my word in first time meeting not to represent specific ideology, hoping the stranger becoming my friend. We may talk about the essential issue around the world enough.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Victoria!
Thank you for doing your homework. I agree with what you have mentioned. Most of the time, religion and politics are topics that cause heated arguments due to differences when it comes to opinion. The best thing is to understand and if possible, try to avoid those topics.
-T. Caitlyn
There is a proverb in Korea, "Politics and religion are never good topics, even at home." I can't help admiting it. 
>> There is a proverb in Korea, "Politics and religion are never good topics, even at home." I can't help but agree with it. 
Honestly, I regard it more important to share own opinion freely than to keep a shallow relationship.
>> I honestly think that it is more important to share one's opinion freely than to keep a shallow relationship.
But each restrict stance about the topics exsists everywhere. 
>> But restrictions with specific topics are everywhere.
I usually hold my tongue, trying not to against someone's nerve.
>> I usually hold my tongue trying to not get into someone's nerves.
Once you made a friendship with others, It is possible to overcome the diffences of political or religious view. 
>> Once you became friends with others, it is possible to overcome the differences in political and religious views.
How about first-met people? I don't have to listen to them. So are they.
>> How about the people I met for the first time? I don't have to listen to them and vice versa.
First impression also can be ruined due to prejudice.
>> First impressions can also be ruined due to prejudice.
I said sharing personal view is more important than maintaining superficial relationship. 
>> Like what I've said, sharing personal views are more important than maintaining a superficial relationship. 
But potential in relationship is the most important part. 
>> But the potential to be in a relationship is the most important part. 
I don't want to lose a chance to gain good friend tomorrow because of my bias today.
>> I don't want to lose a chance to gain good friends in the future because of being bias today.
So I care my word in first time meeting not to represent specific ideology, hoping the stranger becoming my friend. 
>> So I am careful with my words during first meetings and try not to represent a specific ideology, hoping that the stranger becomes my friend. 
We may talk about the essential issue around the world enough.
>>Talking about essential issues around the world is enough.
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