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I was inspired by Edison, one of the many inventors.
He was born in the United States and loved to experiment.
So later, he invented many things, such as phonographs and electric lights.
Among them, I was most impressed by the invention process of the electric light in Edison.
He did 9,000 experiments to invent an electric light.
He didn't take it as a failure to conduct countless experiments.
He thought he just found out that the light bulb didn't work.
Therefore, I was inspired and wanted to emulate, like Edison, looking at failure in a positive light.
Studying is not going my way now, and employment may not go my way when I become an adult.
But I'll look at failure positively and look more closely at what is lacking so that I don't get frustrated.

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Hi Sarah! 

Here's the correction. 

Teacher Andrea 

I  was inspired by Edison, one of the many inventors.
>> I was inspired by Thomas Edison, one of the many inventors. 

He was born in the United States and loved to experiment.
>> Correct 

So later, he invented many things, such as phonographs and electric lights.
>> Correct 

Among them, I was most impressed by the invention process of the electric light in Edison.
>> Among them, I was mostly impressed on the invention process of the electric light. 

He did 9,000 experiments to invent an electric light.
>> Correct 

He didn't take it as a failure to conduct countless experiments.
>> Correct 

He thought he just found out that the light bulb didn't work.
>> He thought that he just found out that the light bulb didn't work.

Therefore, I was inspired and wanted to emulate, like Edison, looking at failure in a positive light.
>> Correct 

Studying is not going my way now, and employment may not go my way when I become an adult.
>> Correct 

But I'll look at failure positively and look more closely at what is lacking so that I don't get frustrated.
>> But I'll look at the failures positively and look more closely on what is lacking so that I don't get frustrated.
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