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This is not just wording itself.

It shows the difference between ideology of the previous and current government.

Previous Moon goveronment was too much positive and friendly policies to North Korea.

He never didn't dod the policy and words that North Korea doesn't like such as southward invasion etc.

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Hello Ms. Lily!
I don't have any idea about the content of your textbook, however I am curious of the guidelines and why it become a controversy. Are they planning to drop some facts or what?
Share your thoughts later :)
Thanks!
Aki~

This is not just wording itself.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> This is not just the content itself.

It shows the difference between ideology of the previous and current government.
>>> It shows the difference between the ideology of the previous and current government.

Previous Moon goveronment was too much positive and friendly policies to North Korea.
>>> The previous Moon government was too positive and friendly in creating policies for North Korea.

He never didn't dod the policy and words that North Korea doesn't like such as southward invasion etc.
>>> He didn't do the policy and words that North Korea doesn't like such as southward invasion etc.
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