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I came up with some of the mistakes I made before because it can improve my workability and recover my mental shame.

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Hey, Kane!

I hope you know that it is okay to make mistakes. It's what you do after you have made the mistakes that makes all the difference.
Please, do not forget to be kind to yourself and celebrate small wins!

Thank you, and have a great Chuseok!

~ Teacher Gela

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