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What are some of the benefits and disadvantages of electric cars?

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First of all, I think it is really useful thing that can save the fuel and energy. It's because electric cars¡¯ fuel. They don¡¯t necessary for the fossil fuels. In other words, we don¡¯t need to use limited resources. But in real world, there are just few charging station in some country. Many of country have lots of gas station all of electronic cars charging station. Also, the disadvantage is that it is expensive because the demand of electric cars is low. It is really eco-friendly technology but it isn¡¯t ready to be commercialized yet..

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Hi, Harry! ^_^ 
Thank you for writing this essay. I agree with your opinions with regards to this topic. 
Electronic cars are a wonderful invention but it's not yet ready to be commercialized. 
I hope you're having an awesome day. ^_^
See you again on Wednesday. :)
~Teacher Charry

First of all, I think it is really useful thing that can save the fuel and energy. 
>> First of all, I think it is a really great way to save fuel and energy. 
It's because electric cars¡¯ fuel. They don¡¯t necessary for the fossil fuels. 
>> It's because electric cars do not consume fossil fuels. 
In other words, we don¡¯t need to use limited resources. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> To put it simply, there's no need for us to use non-renewable energy sources. 
But in real world, there are just few charging station in some country. 
>> But in the real world, there are just a few charging station in some countries. 
Many of country have lots of gas station all of electronic cars charging station.
>> Many countries have more gas stations than charging stations for electronic cars. 
Also, the disadvantage is that it is expensive because the demand of electric cars is low. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Another disadvantage is that, electronic cars are expensive because the demand for them is low. 
It is really eco-friendly technology but it isn¡¯t ready to be commercialized yet..
>> It is really an eco-friendly technology but it isn¡¯t ready to be commercialized yet.
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