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HOMEWORK:
What is the best sight that you have seen in Korea? Share this sight in a few sentences.

The best sight I have seen is Jeju island. Everywhere in Jeju Island is magnificent. The blue sea and green forest relieve our fatigue and mind. I want to live a house where I can see the Han River and greenery. That's my dream.

Thank you Donna. Have a Happy weekend!

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Good evening, Hae Ju!

In an episode of the Korean drama "Extraordinary Attorney Woo", there was one about Jeju Island and it sure was breathtaking. This place is complete with the sea, mountain, and all the lovely things nature could offer. Unfortunately, industry as well as progress pave their way and nature needs to be compromised as you have reiterated on your homework answer. This place is surely one on my bucket list.

Here on your composition, the only the grammar suggestions I made  is the preposition 'in" on your fourth sentence. The rest are all correct, great job!

Have a peaceful and enjoyable weekend to you!

-T. Donna~

The best sight I have seen is Jeju island. 
>> Correct!

Everywhere in Jeju Island is magnificent. 
>> Correct!

The blue sea and green forest relieve our fatigue and mind. 
>> Correct!

I want to live a house where I can see the Han River and greenery. 
>> I want to live in a house where I can see the Han River and greenery. 

That's my dream.
>> Correct!

Thank you Donna. Have a Happy weekend!
>> Correct!
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