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Hi, Donna.
I'm sure you are getting asleep.
It's too late, thus I don't have enough energy.
However, I have to do my homework before I get a sleep.
In fact, every the end day of the month, I have a lot of paper works.
It's about our employee's salary, monthly income, and some kind of statistics.
And last night, there was another matter.
One staff texted me, and it was related about our clinic manager's fault.
She was so upset because she thought that the manager looked down on her every time.
So, I tried to calm down her.
It took about one and half an hour.
Can you imagine how I feel?
It was so terrible to me, but she seemed to get better.
Today's homework is about beauty.
You gave me the sentence. "Beauty is only skin deep?"
Actually, I didn't understand that sentence, so I looked the correct meaning, and now I understand.
I can say that loving beautiful is natural.
Even babies like a beautiful person.
Denying beauty is not normal.
Be honest!
Now I got to go to bed.
See you soon.

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Good morning, Dr. Kim!

I admire your endurance and strength in staying very late at night to submit your homework. Now that is true excellence! What is more is your patience in resolving issues at work. It is good that you calmed your employee down because office dynamics is truly stressful when staff are mongering about each other (it's a woman thing, I guess... ^^). Anyway, all is well that ends well. 

For your homework, your honesty is absolutely my stance about beauty. We are attracted to beautiful things. Pretending not to acknowledge beauty is a lie. As we age, we can redefine beauty and find other meanings such as stability, consistency, and perfection. Therefore, eventhough we have our own subjective definition, we can all still agree regardless of culture that beauty is real in all societies.

Your composition showed a smooth introduction, two parts for the body, and a grand conclusion about the question. The grammar suggestions were more on the syntax (arrangements of words) and diction (choice of words) to enhance a few of your sentences. You've done really great on this one. 

See you around! Enjoy your lunch!

-T. Donna~

Hi, Donna.
>> Correct!

I'm sure you are getting asleep.
>> I'm sure you are fast asleep.

It's too late, thus I don't have enough energy.
>> Correct!

However, I have to do my homework before I get a sleep.
>> However, I have to do my homework before I get sleep.

In fact, every the end day of the month, I have a lot of paper works.
>> In fact, every last day of the month, I have a lot of paper works.

It's about our employee's salary, monthly income, and some kind of statistics.
>> Correct!

And last night, there was another matter.
>> Correct!

One staff texted me, and it was related about our clinic manager's fault.
>> Correct!
Or: One staff texted me, and it was related to our clinic manager's fault.

She was so upset because she thought that the manager looked down on her every time.
>> Correct!

So, I tried to calm down her.
>> Correct!
Or: So, I tried to calm her down.

It took about one and half an hour.
>> Correct!

Can you imagine how I feel?
>> Correct!

It was so terrible to me, but she seemed to get better.
>> Correct!

Today's homework is about beauty.
>> Correct!

You gave me the sentence. "Beauty is only skin deep?"
>> Correct!

Actually, I didn't understand that sentence, so I looked the correct meaning, and now I understand.
>> Actually, I didn't understand that sentence, so I looked for the correct meaning, and now I understand.

I can say that loving beautiful is natural.
>> Correct!

Even babies like a beautiful person.
>> Correct!

Denying beauty is not normal.
>> Correct!

Be honest!
>> Correct!

Now I got to go to bed.
>> Correct!

See you soon.
>> Correct!
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