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What is the best characteristic of the city?

Cities are good for living because of many convenient facilities.
I can go department store easily and get a variety of items.
Also, when I am ill, I find hospitals and pharmacies regardless of where I am.
Museum, theaters and facilities for activities are more accessible, and I could enjoy new movies and exercise.
I like to eat out and I'm interested in finding fancy restaurants.
In cities, especially Seoul, there are so many famous restaurants which rank high between customers.
There are so many transportations to be used like trains, buses and taxes.
People are able to go anywhere in the cities taking transportations.
Sometimes, I'm tired of crowded people, pollutions and busy life in cities, but I love to live in Seoul because of these convenience and entertainments.

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Good day, Dr. Stella!

The city equals all the conveniences life could offer. What can we not do in the city? All we need is money and time to experience everything we desire to access.

Your composition is solidly cohesive and compact with information, examples, and it had a great execution. The suggestions I places are some correct forms of words. See the underlined ones below. Being mindful of the correct word form adds more sophistication and accuracy to your composition. By itself, it had a strong introduction, body, and a smooth conclusion. Excellent job!

See you in class soon!

-T. Donna~

Cities are good for living because of many convenient facilities.
>> Correct!

I can go department store easily and get a variety of items.
>> I can go to the department store easily and get a variety of items.

Also, when I am ill, I find hospitals and pharmacies regardless of where I am.
>> Correct!

Museum, theaters and facilities for activities are more accessible, and I could enjoy new movies and exercise.
>> Correct!

I like to eat out and I'm interested in finding fancy restaurants.
>> Correct!

In cities, especially Seoul, there are so many famous restaurants which rank high between customers.
>> In cities, especially Seoul, there are so many famous restaurants which rank high among customers.

There are so many transportations to be used like trains, buses and taxes.
>> There are so many transportations to be used like trains, buses and taxis.

People are able to go anywhere in the cities taking transportations.
>> Correct!

Sometimes, I'm tired of crowded people, pollutions and busy life in cities, but I love to live in Seoul because of these convenience and entertainments.
>> Sometimes, I'm tired of crowded people, pollutions,  and busy life in cities, but I love to live in Seoul because of these conveniences and entertainments.
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